P.S.S (I reviewed for Chapter Three, read that first) Since the computer denied me a second review, I realized that in the beginning you described James as having brown hair, and in the end of Chapter Three you describe him as having dark blond. Not a big deal of course, just wanted to mention.

-Kristy

This story is absolutely amazing. It's original, it's thrilling, it's 'hot', haha, and I'm on tenterhooks waiting for more. Wow. Just wow. Keep up the fantastic work, you should seriously look into getting this published if you finish it. One side note though- before I read how you found your information, I Google-d the yellow rose and in all the meanings I found, none of them said 'infidelity.' The Wikipedia article you used didn't cite all its references or something. Just mentioning.

-Kristy

P.S. I love a good bad guy, and GM is superb! I was actually giggling at some of his more intense lines. And 'Hanging' was such a cliffhanger. I'll stop raving now.

...you continue to amaze me! The suspense is killing me! :D

Awesome. Can't wait to see where this is going.

~Kellie

Hmm... Something tells me that this 'penality' isn't going to be an easy, or good, one. haha. Yup.. He's weird. Something tells me mister gm is going to give me the creeps in later chapters. He's just sorta...a lingering creep right now haha. Anyways, update soon and keep it up!

Faith

he's so creepy!

great chapter... i love it so far...cant wait to see what happens next...

I find this very interesting. It is very different; I like it. "GM" seems like a very intriging person. Please update soon!

Oddly I am at a loss of words. I would love to provide constructive criticism (sp? Grr...My spelling skills of become repulsive) but I have yet to find something that needs critequing (sp? Gr 3). I must say you write very nicely, you use words more descriptive and of higher inteligence. I had to use a dictionary occaisonally to make sure that I was interpreting the text correctly, my intelligence is slipping sadly...Anyways I love this story, it appears to be well plotted and carefully thought through. It reminds me of Saw, the movie, because it makes me think. The story seems deep and I can't help but love it...I realize this probably doesn't seem like much seeing as you probably get this often but I had to get it off my chest.

First of all woow! this story is totally amzaing its totally creepy, the party and the formality in the party are just wonderful! I also love how Valerian is changing her view of his boyfriend very slowly, I wonder if it's she is gona become a little meaner in the way she sees her boyfriend, you know like if you love normal chocolate but now you found very dark chocolate but don't want to admit that plain chocolate is a bit boring and well plain... I also wonder if he is going to remove all the pieces from her life, her boyfriend her friend? mm I'm wondering to much! but a wonderful story really! count me as your fan!

Okay...i liked but I have more questions. First Why did he let James be the Hunter? He doesn't seem like the tpye of person to let go of control that easily. Next, Charlie, why does is she so possessive over GM? And why do the other players seem so unfriendly?

Anyways I like the story, as stated above. Can't wait for the next chapter. Lilly

ps is this story going to have any violence later on?

THANK YOU. This is the kind of story that I've been waiting for someone else to write. It's really great. I look forward to more!

Great chappie! GM ...

I'd seriously be freaked out of I walked in to a party like that ... I don't know . the formality would just feel so weird. Lol..

Update soon

Huh. You'd think she would have connected "GM" with GrandMaster right away, especially since that letter has to be on her mind constantly (because, you know, it's so stalkerish and creepy that who could forget it?). Then again, who expects that kind of thing?

Creepy, creepy, creepy...

I'm seriously fighting the heebie jeebies right now (which is a good thing, and a compliment to you), but I'm also wondering if she's not living up to his expectations. He seems to think she has everything planned out to the tiniest detail, as he does, but that's obviously not the case. Will he be disappointed and leave her alone?

Eh, obviously not, but this might change the way he does things. Whatever happens, I'm looking forward to more!

Intresting game. It really messes with your mind. Keep writting, it's getting really good!