|Reviews for He ended up were he started|
| Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 10/1/2007
But great story.
| Unbeknownst chapter 1 . 8/14/2007
Part of me is wondering if that was a summary, or an actual story. If it was a summary . . . um, expand on it, and it could be something. If it wasn't-you need an editor. Even if it's just a friend, looking over things before you post them, there were major grammatical errors, it did not flow well, and honestly? It seemed too rushed. The goal here isn't for word count one way or another-it's to post and share-so don't be afraid to expand on it, and write something a bit longer! There were some nice turns of phrase, but even they were impacted by the bad grammar-honestly, just get someone to proofread for you, and the quality of your writing will dramatically improve.