Reviews for Recovering Suicidal Teenage Journal
Lillith Green chapter 1 . 5/18/2012
This first chapter is very intriguing. I really like Anna's character she seems to have a lot of spunk and personality. I can't wait to read more, I have been in multiple psychiatric units so I am always curious to read stories about them.
wow chapter 2 . 9/18/2007
i love it, please updqate this story as well! ]
wow chapter 1 . 9/18/2007
intense & original! ] I'm listening Anna! I'm listening! ]
Tristan-the-Dreamer chapter 1 . 8/24/2007
Please write more! I love journal-stories. This subject is truly important.
NeoMiniTails chapter 1 . 8/22/2007
OMG! I just tried to send a review and then the cpu messed up and now I have to rewrite the review. Oy vai!

Anyways, I'm very happy to be the first to review this story of yours.

Compliments:

- I can see you have a nice little plot going on here.

- Nice somewhat backdrop of the character.

- Kept me reading.

- Not boring.

_ Good job on working on a hard subject for many to deal with and trying to be comical while keeping the drama.

- Polyester girl was kinda funny. _

Disappointers:

- Grammar

- Check the emotion of the piece

- Too quirky...

- Needs more sarcasm to fit the genre and what it is about to be more realistic.

- The girl's suicidal-ness isn't exactly the most believable

- Too rushed

Grammar:

- Some words were missing in some parts

- Some sentences had to be rechecked over and over to understand what you were trying to say

- Missing things that cause for pause (,) among other things.

- Fix the grammar of the summary... many will think you're lazy and won't read it because of the missing capitalization.

Originality:

- From what I've read on FP, this is very original.

Characterization:

- Kinda nice characterization of main

- Very good on supporting characters.

Believability:

- Somewhat believable

Suggestions:

- Get a beta

- I could be your beta

Overall Thoughts:

- I liked your story... it was very nice, easy to enjoy.

- Just needs a few things fixed...

I went into much more detail before but this sums up everything in a neater way. _ Hope this helps!