|Reviews for acrylic|
| by His blood chapter 1 . 12/9/2007
so true. it's all been written before, but you expressed it perfectly, and the feeling bleeds through so raw and so honest and ... this is truth. i know this. this is her. this is me. and it hurts.
| Bright Green chapter 1 . 8/19/2007
ah what a brilliant metaphor.
| sincerely disregard chapter 1 . 8/19/2007
I love the feeling of this and the sentiment and the metaphor, but I do think you are mixing your metaphors a little bit with engraved. Normally I'm all for mixed metaphors, but in this case it doesn't really sit right for me. I think that it is because the entire rest of the poem is so clearly about paint that engraved just doesn't work. Maybe a darker and less specific word would work better, like contaminated, befouled, defiled, tinted, darkened, or discolored. It is still good with out the change but I was just putting the thought out there.
| hey maria chapter 1 . 8/19/2007
I love that metaphor.