|Reviews for Clean Confused|
| iwishillwilluponyou chapter 1 . 12/4/2007
ah so cute _ *fangasm*
| HaPpYGuRl chapter 1 . 11/25/2007
This was the first time that i read something like this[along the lines of a TV show!]and it was very well-written!...cutE :)
| failte200 chapter 1 . 11/13/2007
he! "He was either fascinated by his own crotch or texting someone" - that was great. So was Ian "thanking the coffee-table for miraculously providing him with water".
And the premise was good too. Now see - my way of doing things would've been to let the reader know right off that they were mistaken about each other, and then watch them continue to do so for awhile, but considering it, your way worked better for this story. I must try to keep that in mind.
You did resolve the angst awfully quickly though - after spending quite a while building it up... but I know how that goes, especially when you're shooting for a short one-shot, rather than a multi-chapter epic. And I must have missed the part where Ian initially asked Ryan out... maybe it was too subtle for me. :) But I like how Ryan - from Nebraska - thought a pink shirt automatically marked him as gay, whereas to LA-Ian, it meant no such thing.
Long review eh?
Oh, and *I* think you should italicize people's thoughts, rather than single-quote them. But maybe that's just me.
Anyway - good story. Aw!
| Salvation Tuna chapter 1 . 11/12/2007
Oh, you have no idea how awesome [and difficult] it is to find a good-quality (slash) one-shot round' here.
I thought I had reviewed this one before but after re-reading I realized, 'Cheesenips, I haven't left some feedback!'
Sides', it would be a sin not reviewing such an original piece.
Because it is indeed, very original.
Your a remarkable writer, [I know flattery gets you nowhere but this situation calls for it], - the characters are wonderfully portrayed and very easy to become attached to, even in such a short time interval. [I only wish there was more for me to feed on]. Ian's childish nature and Ryan's merciless temper really make an uber dynamic combo.
God Bless you, child. You have taken the elements of hate/love relationships, misunderstandings, and biting dialogues to the next dimension.
You've glorified my day.
Its completely selfish of me but, would you write more one-shots? Maybe dig up one of those itchy plots that you think don't have any potential when in actuality they are the next big thing since sliced bread?
Yeah. I know you got them.
And Yeah, get yourself that bigger belt.
| Lorenz S chapter 1 . 10/8/2007
I'm so looking forward reading more of your stories.
I thought this is so funny and cute. I like it a lot.
| DEwy chapter 1 . 9/23/2007
That makes me want to watch this show so much.
Gawd, you are an amazing writer. I was hooked right from the start of the story and the ending is sweet. It makes me wanna read another chapter but this time from Ian's perspective &hinthint&.
| Lerene chapter 1 . 9/14/2007
great oneshot. I really liked it.
"... if I could get away with it I’d take my jeans off too!” That would be pretty hot to see, but I doubt any male that works with power tools would take their pants off. They may lose something. he he.
| magalina chapter 1 . 9/8/2007
Aw, that was too cute :) They were both adorable. Great job!
| This Account is Abandoned chapter 1 . 9/3/2007
now I kinda want to know how Ian could have asked him out without Ryan realizing. XD
| EstherDay chapter 1 . 8/31/2007
This was so cute! It started a little slow, but I loved the ending!
| Cealex chapter 1 . 8/26/2007
Insanely cute XD I loved the whole...
'i asked you out and you said no!'
'wtf no you didn't!'
'yes i did'
so awesome XD I was like ROFL P Cute one-shot, WRITE MORE PLZ. KTHXBAI
| mandrake-o chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Lol. Hey, I love lifestyle shows. My favourite channel is Discovery Home and Health, followed by the food channel, and the lifestyle channel... but of course, it's not like I watch them all day every day.
Anyway, I liked the story, but I wanted more elaboration on how Ian asked Ryan out and Ryan didn't know.
| bleepbloopbanana chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Cute one shot. I had a few issues with it... you seemed to change tenses randomly and there were a few grammar/spelling mistakes littered about. However, the plot was good and the dialogue was solid, which made it an enjoyable read.
You do good work, keep writing. -hums-
| xanthofile chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
ah, it's still cute. i picture that guy from Trading Spaces...crap, what was his name? oh well, i picture him as Ryan...maybe his name WAS Ryan. O.o lol
| LepidotzoroTheIntern chapter 1 . 8/20/2007
Lol, I love it xD. Very funny ending... perfect timing too.