I really like this. It's an interesting concept, and I really like how the last two lines tie the whole thing together. Good work, you're very talented so keep writing!

I really liked this, it was almost masochistic in its own way. That really gave it a unique edge. Nicely done.

I really liked the last 2 lines, they really drew the whole thing together, & closed it nicely. Very good job, keep writing.

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that was brilliant, haha, i love the last 2 lines, it really tied up the piece very nicely together

interesting perspective. i kinda like it.