|Reviews for Destiny|
| openmouthblues chapter 1 . 8/23/2007
This is a good poem, but the rhyme scheme sounds a little forced. Try breaking the lines up a little more, or maybe just letting it not rhyme at all.
I've found that, with poetry, letting it just flow works better than trying to make it work. If it rhymes, so be it. If it doesn't, that's fine, too.
Anywho, just take some time to look at this and consider the beat/flow of the poem itself.