|Reviews for when I grow up|
| elasticbobaturtle chapter 1 . 2/9/2009
Wow, I love the voice you've captured in this poem, it's so clear and universal. The way you phrase things is so clever, too. Your words, though simple, really express the emotion of this person so well. Lovely.
| Her Wishing Well chapter 1 . 9/8/2007
Wow this was different and great. I love " Scrape my knees over the words" and "wanting to be alive" I mean thats so profound, and intresting i bet not many people think of growing up in that way. Well done.
| kit feral chapter 1 . 8/29/2007
"every night, I want to say I'm absolutely thrilled to be breathing"
I guess I grew up this year.
this is amazing, it's so strong and just... lovely.
as a poet, you've already lived a hundred years, my dear
| take me somewhere nice chapter 1 . 8/25/2007
You will, one day you'll become alive, if you haven't already. Really though, the laughter you want and the sorrow you wish to experience are right there; you just have to find them. It's important that we stop trying to find out what we want to do with our lives, and just live them. As Carl Sandburg once said "I'm an idealist. I don't know where I'm going, but I'm on my way there."
And it seems like you are desperately searching for something (sorry, I kinda chuckled when I read line 5 because I'm going to minor in child psychology), to which I wish I could tell you what; but I can't.
But you are alive. The pain you feel, and the joy you come across from time to time is infact you living. Don't forget that, you are alive; maybe you just need to be reminded why.
| smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 8/24/2007
That's a good ambition. But I think you should be alive while you are growing too. When I grow up, I just want to hear God saying that He is proud of me. I need that. I need to hear that my Lord was okay with me. That through years of trials and churning that the end was worth. When I grow up, I just want to be what God made me. I want to be in love too. But not with life. I was to be madly in love with Jesus (more than now). I just want to know him. I think this kind of spoke to me and made me think about what I wanted to be. Because I never knew. And I always tried to figure it out. But now I am going to be like Abraham. I am just going to go. Not know where I am going, when or how. I am just going to go. And I am just going to trust that God will put everything in place. I don't know. Your poem made me think. I like that. And your poem was pretty awesome. Keep writing, hun. You know you have an amazing gift. )