|Reviews for No Matter, Enlightened|
| Midnight In Eden chapter 1 . 10/7/2007
First off, the LSD was funny because there's only really only one type of LSD and it's will fuck you up so badly. I'm thinking "drug" might've worked better. Secondly, center alignment does jack all, so why bother?
Thirdly, make your punctuation consistent. There should be a period at the end of the poem. There should be a few periods through the whole piece. If you use punctuation, even just once, use it through the whole poem consistently.
Finally, this isn't great but it's not bad either. It seems like you're doing more telling than showing and that's a big no no in poetry. Vivid, specific imagery brings a poem to life and this doesn't have much of that. I think this could easily be expanded on to make it more interesting.