|Reviews for Stained|
| Emely chapter 1 . 8/28/2007
I enjoyed this poem. I felt the repetition works, although usually I don't like repetition too much.
I do, however, have a few suggestions.
Consider playing around with capitalization, and not capitalizing the first letter of every line, just to shake things up.
I'm also not sure if the semicolon in the last line works. I would prefer a comma, but that is your preference.
Thanks for the read.
| Duck Tape Girl chapter 1 . 8/28/2007
extremely intense! nice job! i really liked it... i didnt really see anything wrong with it except (i know this minor but) the "v" in "Everywhere" i dont think you meant for it to be capitalized... if you did sorry for saying that... but other than that, very nice job. i really got into and could kind of feel the pain. well, have a great day!