Reviews for When You're Gone
ihrtbks chapter 1 . 9/1/2007
The steps-to-the-door was cute, and I like how he loves her enough to keep coming back. And good grammar always a plus; you actually punctuate dialog! But if you want to put participles in, you always put them at the beginning; switch it up a little: put them at the end, put them after the noun...though you may need to add a couple of words.

KEEP IT UP!
angeloftheninthorder chapter 1 . 8/31/2007
A beautiful piece. There were a few places where a word was missing, but it was a lovely piece regardless of those.