|Reviews for him|
| fairytale failure chapter 1 . 10/5/2007
I like this piece of writing. It seems a bit like a study, a very close observation of this boy. I especially love the line starting with 'He's just so enigmatic', the part about the mirror is really well done.
You say 'to the souls of your feet'; maybe that was just an error (because we have soles, not souls in our feet) but if that was on purpose it was a really good play on words. You could make it more obvious by italicizing the word souls. Also, I think you could do a bit of editing so that it flows better.
| concerto49 chapter 1 . 9/1/2007
Yeah, in a way, it's hard to picture someone simply by words. We're humans, not objects. There's too much to be said and even saying is not enough.
I guess you could call this your perspective of him, or at least a part of it. It is what you intended to show of what you thought of him.
Yeah, now I'm confused too. Anyhow.
| amelodyofspring chapter 1 . 9/1/2007
wow thats really good. i would like to read more of your stuff.
totally emo srz
**born from heaven
burns in hell~
| Avalons Rebirth chapter 1 . 9/1/2007
Interesting. I don't know why, but I get the impression that you're writing about a little boy. (maybe 9 or 10) Are you?