Reviews for Jonnie the Girl
gulistala chapter 38 . 8/28/2010
Except the topic is going to be brought up by someone before she has the chance to.
gulistala chapter 35 . 8/27/2010
But it seems a little too good to be true...
gulistala chapter 27 . 8/27/2010
Thank you, Jonah, for those much needed words!
gulistala chapter 13 . 8/27/2010
Wow! I'm sorry but Jonnie, girl, you're an idiot! So dense!

Poor Ryder, I want to give him a bear hug right now. Ouch.
gulistala chapter 12 . 8/27/2010
Oh Jonah was gealous? Ha.
gulistala chapter 11 . 8/27/2010
Wait is Jonah gealous or gay?
CaRiNeSs chapter 41 . 8/17/2010
I stayed up till 3AM (the time it is right now) to finish this story and I am literally in tears... I don't even know how to tell you how much my heart hurts for Jonnie or you if you are the person that you modeled Jonnie are a very strong person and I am amazed at the story... I am so sad... I kept waiting for the happy ending... I hope you get yours and Jonnie gets hers even if it wasn't with Ryder... I am so heartbroke... I wanted to read the sequel but with Ryder dead, I don't know that I can...

I think the worst part is knowing that this is a true story or is at least based on one... I can't even begin to imagine the pain and heartache...if it was fiction I could think that at least something so painful didn't really happen but with knowing it makes me sad and I feel very blessed to have the happy life that I sometimes take for granted...

I have a horrible feeling that I am going to have nightmares since I read this right before going to sleep...Thanks for writing this story was really moving...
Genato chapter 41 . 8/15/2010
I am so sorry that "Ryder" died. Don't listen to my criticisms earlier. It doesn't need more depth since it's real life. :) However, if it was just a story, I hope you'll put more depth in their relationship, like leaning on each other, trusting... etc. :)
Genato chapter 32 . 8/15/2010
Frankly, when I read your author's note about someone flaming you, I agreed to some parts. It didn't look as if this fic was written by a 19 year-old. It just seems so... light-hearted (which is not bad, especially since this is partly a humor genre fic) and... thoughtless? I thought of it as being written as a bit like a stream-of-consciousness type...? It lacks depth (emotional and intellectual). I know that you based it from real life but I was wishing for more insights? Also, your chapters are jumping all over the place like, it lacks transition. :(

But, I like your plot. But I feel confused on where it's going 'coz I feel like you have a lot of "fillers"?

Anyway, it's your choice whether or not you'll listen to someone like me who hasn't written a decent story in decades (but I've read a lot), so yeah. I hope you don't take my criticisms badly. I just want you to improve so I can read better fics! :D
primosbeeching chapter 41 . 8/11/2010
I love this story, I love how I couldn't stop getting hooked on the characters and the determination as well as how much it relates to real life than just a fairy tale ending. Its tragic and I'm almost on the verge of tears in my office. Good job on this.
KAP-the P should be for Piotr chapter 1 . 8/10/2010
Hey babes,

I came on just to see if JtG still has a growing fan-base; I correctly figured it would. I read some of the reviews; sorry to hear about the latest ranter. You know they exist for every story; the fact that she made it to chapter seven at least says she tried though. Sometimes people just have different taste. Either way, don't let it get you down. After all, Rae and I know your true love *cough*three times is a kink*cough* for blonds.

I miss you, Jons. Can't wait for my Ana-Jonnie-Ro to come back up to northern-southern-Cali where it's not five minutes away from Mexico. Tell Shamu "Mickey says hello!" ;) I love you!
Lady Selkie chapter 7 . 8/10/2010
Alright, I just can’t read anymore of this.

At first I was like, this is alright. It’s only the beginning; some good stories have a slow beginning. But it hasn’t gotten better and I’ve been forcing myself to read in hopes that it might get better and you might start smarting up with your writing and characters.

I mean, it doesn’t feel like you have a solid grip of Jonnie anymore. The first chapter was better and the second wasn’t bad either. But then after, the quality dropped and I’m just not seeing how it got the endless amount of praise. Or even any fucking awards, at all.

Original? I think not. Apparently these dimwits have never heard of the horrid site know as Quizilla, granted that there are some good authors on there. The only problem being that it is almost impossible to find them, because they sure as hell won’t be on the popular or best rated page.

Anyway, besides some spelling mistakes and grammar, your writing wasn’t too bad. But apparently not good enough.

Also, one more thing and this really bothers me in stories. It’s about the blonde characters in here. No, I am not talking about the boys. It’s the blonde females. Or even the mention of blonde. I can practically feel the malice dripping off when you describe the character.

Kelsey? She’s a blonde. A whore and a ditz that has the words “nail me” or whatever practically printed across her forehead. Hm... As well as she’s in the way for Jonnie and any possible relationship with Trent. And you know it wouldn’t be such a big thing, except for the fact that you CIRCLE EVERYTHING that’s wrong with her around the fact that she is blonde.

Monika? She’s a poser punker or whatever. Her blonde roots are showing through. So what? Maybe she can’t afford it? She likes something that is fendi. Big fucking deal. She has a pink razor phone? What about it? Punk isn’t about all dark colors, stupid. Oh and of course, she just has to be the bitchiest person ever to Jonnie, I mean; you have to give a reason for why Ryder broke up with her. You know, so you could get her out of the way for Jonnie. Again.

Your- excuse me, Jonnie’s friend, April was it? Because she is so naive and clumsy or whatever, she should have been born a blonde, I mean, she’s just a walking contradiction because she has mousy brown hair instead of that blonde!

And I think that there is a very high chance that there will be more. You also have Jonnie saying that she doesn’t like to stereotype. Well guess what you are doing?

So I have one thing to say to you on that. Grow up.

There are probably, if not more, brown, black, red, rainbow haired girls out there who act like sluts and are “posers”, who act cheery and ditsy.

This is like I’m reading a self insert or something. It feels like it is a fantasy fulfillment for you. There is no plot. At least I’m not getting anything.

You must be some sad, lonely brunette teenager. Not getting any attention? Probably not.

Spite towards blondes? It would seem so.

Some more problems: What about jobs? Money? How about classes? Are they still going to school? When is it? You need to give out details. They make a big fucking difference.

So I leave this story with a major headache and a shame that it has gotten the endless praise of pre teen girls and awards for its shitty writing and unoriginal plot. Sort of like Twilight.

Go ahead and respond. Spit at me and rage. Insult me or cry. Be butt hurt or whatever. I don’t care. Do the world a favour, delete everything. It will make it so much easier to find good stories. Because trust me, we don’t need another one of these stories.

I will not be scared if you sick one of your fan girls on me either.
Lissya chapter 41 . 8/7/2010
One of the sweetest stories i've read - and the ending made me cry. Thanks so much for sharing it with us on FictionPress.
Mikki chapter 42 . 8/3/2010
I'm not going to lie and say i didn't cry cause i did. Thank you for the story. And thank you for not sugar coating it.
greenmachine18 chapter 41 . 8/3/2010
oh my god. thats all i can say to describe this story. it was so true and raw, which was what made it beautiful. this was an amazing story, good job :)
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