Reviews for The Bartender Was Joking |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Oh my word.. That whole part about pearce "loving her like a sister" was sooo unexpected |
![]() ![]() ![]() Crazy drama. But thoroughly enjoyed. I loved your cast of characters, and the story they made together. Thanks so much for posting! |
![]() ![]() ![]() loved it. |
![]() ![]() Hey, I really like you story I just wanted to point out the inconsistencies in writing about John's age. In this chapter you say that Christina cheated on him when he was 23, like it was in the past, but before you make it seem like he is 23 now because you said he gets he's trust fund in 2 years when he turns 25. This has probably been pointed out to you already, or you fixed it yourself, but I wanted to let you know. |
![]() ![]() It was an ok story I just didnt like that she had a miscarriage |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm glad everyone got a happy ending! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your story. Just got to tell you that. You're amazingly talented. |
![]() ![]() Why is there no mention of doctor's appointments.? |
![]() ![]() For some reason, i'm not able to log in :(. You have a great style of writing and i cried for the first 3 chapters. I usually don't, but i was able to actually feel Loreli's grief. And I got a new word (indubitable) from this chapter too. Thanks for sharing your work. My FP username is maiqst. Regards. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I actually enjoyed this chapter. I like stories when they start off on a rocky edge and continue to stumble gracefully along the way. At first, I assumed I wouldn't like this and would have to move on quickly but this seems promising. I don't think I've written any constructive criticism... I guess you could just avoid using rhetorical questions. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ahh! This makes me cry! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just want to say that this story is gorgeous. I love the ending and the surprise twists. Great job and thanks for sharing it with us! |
![]() ![]() wow I just have to tell you that this is the best fictionpress story I've read so far! I've seriously read this story a 10 times. Thank you so much for this awesome story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() #1. Why not an Annulment? #2. Pretty sure the most accurate form of pregnancy test is a blood test (my friend had to be tested before going on some medication.) The urine tests just test for hCG. #3. It's interesting and well written thus far, I look forward to continuing to read. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hehe I'm a lazy review...I'm sorry :( I should've reviewed more :D Amazingly beautiful story! xx Ali |