Reviews for The Bartender Was Joking |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This is quite amazing, I must say. I hope you update more as soon as possible. I can't wait to read the rest! A. |
![]() ![]() Oh my! What happens when she's sober? She doesn't marry Marty, I understand that now. E! |
![]() ![]() ![]() so excited. haha! |
![]() ![]() please write more as soon as possible. i really love this! one of my favorites on fictionpress. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a really interesting beginning. I'd totally misread your summary, so at first I was a bit confused, but I've figured it all out now, no worries. My heart aches for Lorelei. This story really hit home, because my cousin's fiance ended up being killed overseas. You did an excellent job of capturing that emotion, that helpless, sinking feeling in the pit of your stomach. One thing. "...and I’ll go back to my small, empty apartment to met with more silence." Either you meant to say, 'to be met with...' or 'to meet with...' Either way, I'd just go back and tidy that up. Otherwise, I have no complaints. Beautifully written. Good for you. Cheers, Sammy |
![]() ![]() Please Post More! I'm Hooked (: |
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![]() ![]() UPDATE ASAP PLEASE! |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow. you made me cry. you write beautifully. have you experienced something like this, or are you really just that good at writing from different point of views? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aw. That was his mother, right? Or, you know, not... Anywyas, it's looking good so far. The only thing I really have to say is that I think her relationship with her mother is a tad cliched, “You don’t know me, Mother, and I don’t know you either,” kind of represents that fully. But hey, creative expression, yeah? Anyways, nice job so far. The wedding dress scene in the first chapter especially, as it really portrayed her grief. :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is great...your characters are well-drawn and really give the story depth, Lorelei especially. It's made me kind of sad...but I trust your word that better things are to come. Update soon! |
![]() ![]() You are so making me cry, but I love this story. Plz continue soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like this a lot. It's very intruiging. I can't wait for more. |
![]() ![]() ![]() i really like this so far. but i didn't read the story before this one, and i'm wondering, should i? |