|Reviews for The Bartender Was Joking|
| AlexSays chapter 3 . 9/28/2007
This is quite amazing, I must say. I hope you update more as soon as possible. I can't wait to read the rest!
| Faye chapter 4 . 9/25/2007
Oh my! What happens when she's sober? She doesn't marry Marty, I understand that now. E!
| Trishcbury chapter 4 . 9/24/2007
so excited. haha!
| Pearl chapter 4 . 9/23/2007
please write more as soon as possible. i really love this!
one of my favorites on fictionpress.
| SamanthaNicole chapter 1 . 9/21/2007
This is a really interesting beginning. I'd totally misread your summary, so at first I was a bit confused, but I've figured it all out now, no worries.
My heart aches for Lorelei. This story really hit home, because my cousin's fiance ended up being killed overseas. You did an excellent job of capturing that emotion, that helpless, sinking feeling in the pit of your stomach.
One thing. "...and I’ll go back to my small, empty apartment to met with more silence." Either you meant to say, 'to be met with...' or 'to meet with...' Either way, I'd just go back and tidy that up. Otherwise, I have no complaints.
Beautifully written. Good for you.
| Anna chapter 2 . 9/13/2007
Please Post More!
I'm Hooked (:
| Trishcbury chapter 3 . 9/12/2007
| Jessica chapter 3 . 9/9/2007
UPDATE ASAP PLEASE!
| Trishcbury chapter 2 . 9/6/2007
you made me cry.
you write beautifully.
have you experienced something like this, or are you really just that good at writing from different point of views?
| xtotallyatpeacex chapter 2 . 9/4/2007
Aw. That was his mother, right? Or, you know, not... Anywyas, it's looking good so far. The only thing I really have to say is that I think her relationship with her mother is a tad cliched, “You don’t know me, Mother, and I don’t know you either,” kind of represents that fully. But hey, creative expression, yeah? Anyways, nice job so far. The wedding dress scene in the first chapter especially, as it really portrayed her grief. :D
| burnedtoast chapter 2 . 9/3/2007
This is great...your characters are well-drawn and really give the story depth, Lorelei especially. It's made me kind of sad...but I trust your word that better things are to come. Update soon!
| Haley chapter 2 . 9/3/2007
You are so making me cry, but I love this story. Plz continue soon.
| Clandestiny chapter 1 . 9/2/2007
I like this a lot. It's very intruiging. I can't wait for more.
| Trishcbury chapter 1 . 9/2/2007
i really like this so far.
but i didn't read the story before this one, and i'm wondering, should i?