Reviews for Unseen Sins
a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
I love how this is open for interpretation. Intriguing haiku.
xDancingintheRainx chapter 1 . 9/9/2007
I love the way you've written "shattered". It really adds something extra to the piece. Excellent imagery. Very powerful and almost brutal. Great job and thanks for the review!
tearing hands chapter 1 . 9/8/2007
I love how visual shattered is, it really adds to the haiku.
Thenardier chapter 1 . 9/8/2007
Loved the imagery present here. The last line was brilliant.
Basara chapter 1 . 9/7/2007
abstract yet vivid... hm...

Chidori Nadare chapter 1 . 9/3/2007
My interpretations are:

1. She has been on an accident and it led to damage her eyes(now no one can see her s.h.a.t.t.e.r.e.d eyes). and become blind (blinded by a cloth/on the face–...) or...

2. From the title 'Unseen Sins', it seems that she is tired of seeing all the sins in this world and that's why she blindfolded herself (blinded by a cloth/on the face–...) to be unable to see this world. (now no one can see her s.h.a.t.t.e.r.e.d eyes) and lastly,

3. I think I'm trying to make this more complex as it seems. This maybe an abstract-like haiku, after all.

I like the emphasis on shattered. It definitely adds depth into it. Great job!

Faithless Juliet chapter 1 . 9/2/2007
Beautiful detail, I loved the abstract feeling of this, keep up the good work.

Much love,