Reviews for i was an addict before i was born
i dont have an accout chapter 1 . 10/25/2008
i almost want to say that it was to vulgar.

and that i hate vulgarity but

in its own way

this poem is amazing.


its so raw and real

and it kinda hurts to even read it.

the best part was the first couple of stanzas.

i never comment anything on this website

but this

this was fuckingg awesome.

"I inhale too fast and forget to breathe,

call it fucking romantic that you take my breath away"


"Skinny, is the way I look without my shirt, and it is

not fucking romantic, the way you can trace my ribs as they

intertwine with my veins, so blue it’s like I

was an addict before I was born. "

i dont know how you do it

but keep doing it.

and i hope things got better for you.

"(and it looks like it’s fucking romantic

but all I say is)


I’d rather be dead than be addicted to you. And you say


baby, I, love, you."

and thats sad

because the truth is

that you are addicted to him

aren't you?

great irony.

the end:D
Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 9/5/2007
wow, real and raw. great poem. little long, but still good. keep it up.

painting andromeda chapter 1 . 9/3/2007
I have no words for the beauty of this poem. The adjective to describe it cannot be more perfectly described than by using beautiful and eloquent. Amazing. chapter 1 . 9/3/2007
5. Use proper textual formatting. For example: using only capital letters in the story title, summary, or content is not only incorrect but also a disregard for the language itself.

Great job on the poem. I like the voice in it and that it isn't terribly sappy. To say the least, it isn't what I expected.