I liked this a lot. some advice to advance your writing:

1. show, don't tell

2. pity parties only on special occations

3. vary stentence structure and word choice

4. always read your word out loud

5. editors are devine until #6 is completed

6. writers enjoy killing editors

hope this made you smile, keep writing.

As always your poetry is elegant and simple. You create a mini-world so clearly with just a few words. Perfect words. Not one out of place or wasted. I could learn a lot from you.

Serason.