hey! its great to read more from you :D And Im loving Seb, cant wait for more~!

This story is awesome so far keep up the good work and I can't wait for more.

I'm so happy that you're posting a new story! Have you written it all already? Then, I'm even HAPPIER!

-OK, so Sebastian has an enormous ego, but I think Antonio will take care of that little vanity problem for him! Let him beg! *evil grin*

-I'm intrigued by the stranger in the café, and I hope you just won't drop him from the story. He adds a little mystery.

-I think you made too many allusions to Sebastian 'graceful' physique. "narrow waist," "slender feet," "long fingered hand," "soft, rose lips." These almost make me picture him as an elf... (not what you were going for I imagine. Sorry?) and the weird thing is that we don't know if he's tall or short, or the color of his eyes, but we know that about his feet and fingers!

-"Because I don't like it when it's too easy." Foreshadowing, anyone?

All in all, I'm EXCITED about this new story. I'm a bit lost about the title, but I can't wait for more. When are you going to introduce Antonio?

Cheers!

Falconer.

Sweden? *falls over* Not that I've got anything against the neighbours, but my brain couldn't decide whether to translate this into Swedish or to simply imagine it with a Swedish accent. (Actually, that was kind of hilarious.) It didn't help that I know a girl named Erika. As for the story ... it seems like it'll be a good read. (As long as my subconscious stops the Swenglish narrating. XP) The prose felt a bit stiff, at times. A good rule of thumb is to let the dialogue speak for itself - "said" can go a long way. And ... um. "Seb" doesn't exactly strike me as a Swedish nickname. "Sebbe" is more ... normal. (The final 'e' is pronounced like the first one, FYI.) "Sebby" I can buy, but even that's a stretch. So far ... I'd love to read more. : )

Yay! I'm so happy you're posting a new story. I've been waiting for-ever. :)

I like the setting-never seen a story in Sweden before. But now the setting changes... Is Villaby still in Sweden?

It's wonderful. I really like Sebastian. Can't wait to see more.