I like the way u wrote it.u made something sound perverted sound kind of like poetry in a way. :)

Interesting idea and chosen perspective...it's chock full of typos, though, and should probably have some real paragraphs.

6/10

I don't know why...but I really loved this story. Maybe because I'm at that same age, and that I can see myself and my own lover in the same position? This is a very realistic look at the way teenagers act, and don't really care at all. I enjoyed the story greatly.

LOL You should have kept going.