|Reviews for The Hunger|
| merveilleux24 chapter 1 . 12/26/2007
You might want to change the "My stamina becoming less" line to something about "increasing my distress" or something else less forced, but the fact that you rhymed the WHOLE thing is impressive!
| Needa S chapter 1 . 9/17/2007
Heehehee...I love a good laugh. Awesome write.
| searchlight chapter 1 . 9/15/2007
Oh. You are such a dork.
That's why I like you!
And despite (or maybe because of) the dorkiness, your poem was still really awesome!
| Raventail Blacktalon chapter 1 . 9/15/2007
Bwahahah! I love this!
Not only is it extremely well written, it's entirely accurate. XD
Job well done! ...Oh, now I'm hungry, too...
| Fluffy Piranha chapter 1 . 9/15/2007
Hahaha, this was good. Made me have a good laugh for the day, and I probably needed it too, so thanks for that ;) Wonderful wording.
Hmm, there's just a few things that I spotted and wanted to point out to you, so here goes.
1.) My stamina becoming less,
(( * My stamina's becoming less, * ))
2.) And wait in agony.
(( I thought of something a little better for this line, you can use it if you wish, your choice. It might ruin the rhyming your going for though, didn't think of that .o;
* And in agony, I wait.
Once again, a wonderful little poem of humor. Thanks for sharing it!