Reviews for Playing Tag with the Sun
felicia13 chapter 1 . 9/29/2007
The last two stanzas are beautiful. However, you spelt 'teal' as 'teel' in the second-to-last stanza. Shame, shame.

I love how it ties directly into the previous poem. *sigh* Very, very beautiful. Thanks for re-posting.

Honestly, does truth matter in poetry? I read poetry as if every word were bottled sunlight regardless of whether not it's true. I only care if it sounds right. Not necessarily good, just right. As long as all the feelings are there, what does truth matter?

Felicia.
ihrtbks chapter 1 . 9/16/2007
I LOVE the ending...first we talk about how lazy, blunt, and unobservant people describe 'your' eyes as blue, and then we end with how "I'd never seen a BLUE like that." But the descriptions themselves are gorgeous. Relatively few poems write about just eyes, but I adore the ones that do.

UPDATE SOON!
Ashelin chapter 1 . 9/16/2007
I liked this one too. The sort of small struggle in this average situation. The last line was excellant. Great job.