|Reviews for The Talon Prince|
| Guest chapter 8 . 8/12/2014
I loved it, all of it. One thing I liked (out of dozens of things) as well as in I Am A Flyer is the names. They all just seem to fit together in the world, whether it's personal names or names of cities. Good job
| Bastard From North chapter 8 . 12/29/2013
Well, that was great surprise to found out you had more flyer stories!
And this was little bit similar to that other one but only in the good way!
I really like you're writing style, it is really coool!
| Wings.Of.The.Raven chapter 8 . 2/20/2013
This story was amazing! I almost cried when Nakael was being treated, and before that! It was really emotional, especially when you killed my favorite character and Nakael left him outside the city walls, only taking in his friend. But it was still a really good part.
| The-Angel-Illusion chapter 8 . 5/7/2010
aw. awesome story. Yay. D
| kiki chapter 8 . 9/29/2007
I really like it!
| Iccle Fairy chapter 8 . 9/29/2007
oh yey more flyer stories! !amazing end, so glad he survived, was on the edge of my seat for a while! thanks so much for putting this story up, really enjoyed reading it! fran ~*~
| Iccle Fairy chapter 7 . 9/29/2007
wow, absolutely fantastic chapter! love it! so action filled and so well written! fab :D
| Toxin89 chapter 1 . 9/28/2007
A dark figure glided above the battle scene on big black wings
-On black wings sounds like he's on them, you know? physically on top of them. Mayb something like "A dark firgure with big black wings glided above the battle scene." You can wait till later or the next sentence to state that they're not real.
blades were unbreakable - nothing would break them
-I'm sure that most people wil know what unbreakable means, don't be repetitive, it messes up the flow.
and he rapidly climbed in the sky
-Dosent sound right, maybe "he rapidly climbed HIGHER INTO the sky."
As a Black Talon, he was usually address as Talon, but his real name was Nakael
-Nothing particularly wrong, just if you didn't give info about his name, you could have kept him a mystery, if that's what you had intended.
every one laughed and teased him, or just pretended he wasn’t there. It was because he had no parents.
-I thought noone in an orphanage had parents?
| Iccle Fairy chapter 6 . 9/28/2007
oh dear i don't like the sound of that giggle at the end... i think i have an idea what they're thinking, but I don't like it! fantastic chapter. the characters are becoming really developed and i love you're writing style! keep it up, can't wait for more! fran ~*~
| Iccle Fairy chapter 5 . 9/21/2007
that sounds like a good move! it's getting very exciting! they kicked those plumes asses! but i have a feeling it will get harder ;)
| Iccle Fairy chapter 4 . 9/21/2007
fantastic chapter. the descriptions when he was flying through the city were great! getting very tense now. can't wait to read more! and i may be the only one reviewing it so i am very thankful for you putting it up just for me :D thanks! fran ~*~
| Iccle Fairy chapter 3 . 9/18/2007
ooh great chapter! he's really thrown himself in at the deep end hasn't he! can't wait to read the next chapter which i bet is exciting as things are moving very quickly! fran ~*~
| Iccle Fairy chapter 2 . 9/17/2007
fantastic chapter! great to see his emotions as he adapts to his new role. really like the idea of him being a flyer aswell. it's gonna be an exciting ride i can tell :D fran ~*~
| Iccle Fairy chapter 1 . 9/17/2007
great first chapter. really interesting. great to set the scene and introduce the characters! can't wait to find more out about them! and thankyou for posting it specially for me! just been writing the 'finding out he's a king' part of my story! let me know what you think! fran ~*~