Reviews for Mary Jane Rides Shotgun
Tytherpol chapter 1 . 9/22/2007
haha I really do love this poem.

That name reminds me of those caramel candies and shiny, black shoes.

I think your line breaks are right on, and there weren't too many adjectives that bothered me.

I absolutely love the quote in the first stanza. :)

-The second half of the first stanza is my favorite part of the poem. (And the first half of the second to last stanza.)

Maybe it's a little strange that you ended it on cigarettes since you entitled it shotgun. idk-just an akward meaning.

But hey I love akward metaphors. I know I use my beyond-fair share of them.

I don't particularly like the meaning I had to take from this, but

You painted the scene well, and it's a neat piece.

Good job.
Ashelin chapter 1 . 9/16/2007
The second to last stanza was truly wonderful. Of wanting to be someone else, yet knowing in a way not being like them makes them all the more devoted to you. Good job.