|Reviews for failure to live|
| Lime-Cat chapter 1 . 3/23/2008
I like the imagery and word choice you offer in this piece.
Don't take my word for this (as I'm guilty of going comma happy), but a comma at "A blood-red flow(,) trickling into death"
I also like how you defined life as beauty - very original. I particularly like the last line mainly because you didn't say 'he dies', it's probably the words you use: "...lets go of his earthly ties."
Great Job! Thanks for a great read!