Reviews for failure to live
Lime-Cat chapter 1 . 3/23/2008
Review Game!

I like the imagery and word choice you offer in this piece.

Don't take my word for this (as I'm guilty of going comma happy), but a comma at "A blood-red flow(,) trickling into death"

I also like how you defined life as beauty - very original. I particularly like the last line mainly because you didn't say 'he dies', it's probably the words you use: "...lets go of his earthly ties."

Great Job! Thanks for a great read!