Reviews for Bird Wisdom
half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 9/29/2007
konban wa

This was really sweet, but one of the rhymes threw off the poem. "Cowl" sounded *supremely* forced because it's just not a normal word to use. It seemed as if you couldn't think of anything to rhyme with "owl," so you just worked the poem around the word "cowl." It should be the other way around - working the word into the poem, not the poem into the word. I know that doesn't make sense to a normal mind, but I'm almost brain-dead at the moment; so I'm spewing random bouts of unintelligible babbling. *wink*

Anyway, despite that small part, I really enjoyed reading this. I especially loved the fact that the whole imagery was birds - I love animals. *grin* Birds especially. I applaud this, really. Well done. :)

Zaijen

-Shan-