Reviews for Moore's |
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![]() ![]() Oh, another chapter! It was awesome! Didn't get to read it earlier...school is starting to get hectic. I can't wait for another chapter! |
![]() ![]() Awesome story! Cant wait for the next update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oh..I love your story! Keep up the good work...and fast updates! |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha can't wait to see what happens next! |
![]() ![]() i love it! but why oh why are the chapters short and then we wait so long for an update... ah... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Brilliant, the next chapter should be intresting lol |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like it so far. alittle worried that she is just sleeping in this strange rude man's shop, but i guess desperate times call for desperate measures right? um... im trying to think of something critical to say... but i cant. ill work on it for next chapter ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! he's loosening up around her! And you updated! been looking forward to it since the las one, and it certainly hasn't disappointed. "She felt light-headed and in the pits of her stomach grew a seed of dread." What a great metaphor... Haha, this is going to be really interesting. Lovely chapter, please write more soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() WELL I DIDN'T SEE THAT COMING. NOT. LOL EXCELLENT CHAPTER. PLEASE UPDATE ASAP :-) |
![]() ![]() Yay! Another chapter! I can't wait for the next one! Argh, I hate midterms and papers, good luck and update soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Edmond reminds me a bit of house! grumpy and v. flawed but somehow amusing and loveable all the same |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ya-ay! I was waiting for an update for (what felt like) so long! Nice progression, and of course, great chapter. There are mix ups with tenses (past, present, etc.), and some phrases sound awkward, like: "Jamie was aware of the minute his thigh pressed against hers and she wondered at his warmth." "Wondered," in my opinion, is a shade off. I think "savoured" might be better? There were a few other places I don't remember, and I just reccommend using a thesaurus. Write more soon! Love reading this. |
![]() ![]() ![]() *grin* update soon please. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful :) Your characters are effortless and wonderfully sweet. I love that you don't emphasize race but you also don't avoid it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hahahaha, is this, by any chance, based off black books? i love that show~~ nice story~ |