Reviews for The Cynic's Creed chapter 12 . 10/7/2009
I know you finished this over two years ago, but that was quite possible one of the better stories I've read on this site lately. Though given my lack of having time to read limits my story reading. Heh. That was actually rather inspiring to me. And not overtly cliche. I applaud.
Renee chapter 12 . 9/18/2009
This is the first time i've read a piece of your writing and your really very good. The story felt like a journey, i felt like i was experiencing all the main characters emotions throughout the story. Then near the end, the story takes on a more happier or lighter feel, so right now after finishing it all i'm feeling very smiley. Maybe that's because she(the main character) got a happy ending.

I can't believe i didn't realise you hadn't written her name throughout the entire story, until she writes the hurricane bit. Anyways thanks for the story, it was great D
MingYueMeir chapter 4 . 9/12/2009
Irony - I was listening to Death Cab for Cutie while I read the beginning of this chapter. Ben Gibbard for the win, though I must say NA has always put me to sleep...

Anyway, I'm loving this story so far. You're a talented writer, even if you claim your style has changed.
CMHB chapter 12 . 8/30/2009
That was beautifully written. Normally, I wouldn't read poetry, but you've managed to captivate me and I give you a round of applause for that. I loved how the poetry interaction between the two characters came naturally. Usually, I think reading the cliché with a twist stories are brilliant and I love those type of stories, if you get what I mean. However, after reading this story that you've written, I have to say that I won't look at the other romance stories the same way.

If you were to do some major editing, I would recommend you to try to build up some tension or interaction between Mick and the girl (to be frank, I can't remember her name, or if she even had one) just to give them something to connect with in reality when they figure out each other's identity.

Anyway, great story. Lovely.
Ember Black chapter 12 . 7/23/2009
This . . . was amazing. Absolutely amazing. You should get it published, I'd buy it. I LOVE it _

~Ember Black
natalia chapter 12 . 7/16/2009
ive been a ghost reader for the last 12 chapters, but i enjoyed your story and felt it deserved a review.

it was wonderfully written.

you know that moment where she thinks "i am invincible" and again the same emotion that comes up in the coffee house when she's surrouned by her friends?

i think the word you were looking for both times there was:

ihopeyoudontmind chapter 12 . 7/16/2009
This was amazing.

I don't know what else to say. I'm speechless.
SillyLittleSongwriter at uni chapter 12 . 5/21/2009
(just about to finish work)

It's all very unseemly. You're almost making me cry at work, which is bad, since my office is a fishbowl and everyone can see me.

Oh, it was perfect.

What more can I say?
SillyLittleSongwriter at uni chapter 1 . 5/21/2009
The sad thing is, you get to college (or uni here in NZ) and nothing does change. It was far easier to talk to guys at High school because I knew them all and their opinion of me was already formed. At uni it's a whole new set of people ready to make new first impressions on. It's scary as all hell.

Or maybe I'm just a wimp.

I know exactly where this story comes from, as I'm sure every girl who couldn't fit into a clique can. A truly unique story. I will continue to read.
namenameleah chapter 12 . 5/9/2009
I am so astounded by this story. It's just so emotional and real in a way that changed my entire perspective and possibly changed my life. I don't think I'll ever reread it for the sake of the specific way it made me feel the first time I read it. Wow. Thank you so much for writing this; I'm grateful that someone remembers that stories are not just superficial. I feel as though you took something so significant to me to put into beautiful words. I honestly enjoyed every word of it, especially the narrator's insightful thought. I'm struck by your story so much that I don't think I will be forgetting it any time soon. Talking to people seems worthwhile, and I've just realized that. Thank you again. (:
Beth the Greatful chapter 12 . 3/25/2009
I don't normally review stories, since I don't have an account here (even though I read stories XD)

But I think I'll review yours. Let me start by introducing myself.

My name is Beth (short for Elizabeth), I'm 16, and I'm pretty sure that I AM the main character of your story. Seriously. Honestly.

I loved every word of every sentence of every chapter of this (novel? not sure what to call it lol) Even the punctuation marks. That's how much I loved it.

For a ton of reasons. First, it's great content. Not too much over-plot-basically, it's like real life. I guess that's what really astounds me about this piece. It's the only story I think I've ever read that is actually just a retelling of everyday life.

I've felt every emotion Cordelia felt, experienced every thought, and I can even relate to other characters (Juliette, Nelly, and even Rianna)

It was a really fun ride, and I loved reading all the chapters. I hope you get this published one day (I'd buy it!)

Anyway, I just want to thank you for writing this. You've given me something that's more important than a "lesson" or a "moral of the story"

You've given me a reason to try. You've given me inspiration.

I actually kinda want to know more about you now, hee hee. Get into the head of the person who wrote this. Because it's perfect.

You're awesome.

(& so is your story)
dust and glitter chapter 12 . 3/11/2009
Your story inspires me.

So much.

So thank you.

For writing it.

Because it's amazing .

Ruby Sue chapter 12 . 3/10/2009
I completely adore your novel. 10 x better than False Facades or whatever other shit that's on this website (don't look at my profile, i own some shit of my own, and also don't get me wrong i respect people for uploading their work and writing. writing is good). But anyway, back to your book story thing, I love it because I completely relate to it. I feel as if I'm reading something I'm thinking. I feel like I am your main character, whatever her name his I'm sure you never mentioned it. Frankly, I feel as if this should be a movie but on the other hand it would be completely ruined if it was. And in a way I don't mind if you gave us a cliff hanger at the end. I don't mind that the story is never finished. Cause it can't be finished. There never really was a conflict to solve. The questions the character faces aren't able to be answered. And that's why I love your novel. At the moment I feel very intelligent writing this review, if i stumble across it another day I'll feel like an idiot. Au revoir senora!
love and misadventures chapter 12 . 3/4/2009
Wow. That was AMAZING! I loved it! :D

In chapter 11, when I first read the line, "He takes my milkshake off my tray." I literally got out of my chair and started jumping around and yelling, "YES! I KNEW IT WAS HIM! YES!"

Again, this is a great story! :)
mk985 chapter 12 . 3/3/2009
great story! I liked your writing style. I especially enjoyed how the focus was more on the narrator's/Cordelia's musings about life and her journey of self-discovery with the romantic relationships seeming to take a bit of a back-seat. Her character progression made the final chapter that much better. Btw I only realized half-way through that you didn't give her an actual name, that's how sucked in I was :)
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