Reviews for The World Will Break Your Heart
Shelley chapter 8 . 10/14/2007
Just thought I'd point out that earlier in the chapter you called her dad 53 then a couple paragraphs later you called him 46. Might want to fix that. LOL. By The way, love the story.
venetia20 chapter 8 . 10/14/2007
Wow that was even better than the last chapter! I loved it update soon and keep up the good work!
AngelEvie chapter 8 . 10/14/2007
I really like this story. I hope you keep up the good work! :)
OoohLookACat chapter 8 . 10/14/2007
in the beginning you said

"he was only 53"

and then just as she's leaving

you said

"he was 46 years old"

but other than that i love the chapter

they're so cute together

so sad about her dad though

my grand-dad was sort of in a vegetative state before he died

but he died in his sleep

so i guess it was okay

but that's different

it's her dad, so that must be worse

and damn

that bed must be REALLY comfy.

it sounds comfy lol

and wow lol, you seriously weren't joking about the dropkick murphy's haha

can't wait for the next chapter

izzie
venetia20 chapter 1 . 10/14/2007
Holy crap your story is so awesome! Kylie and Sean are so cute and they're not even together! Keep up the great work and i can't wait until you update again. (seriously i'll probably check my computer every hour to see if you updated! haha jk but yeah i love your story that much!) good luck with the next chapter :]
OoohLookACat chapter 7 . 10/14/2007
ah i love demetri martin!

and SNL :]

i youtubed the snl skit you were on about

ohmygosh lol

hilarious!

loved the chapter

so i guess now sean thinks kylie has a crush on him

but she doesn't know she really does have a crush on him.

haha

funny confusing situation

can't wait for more

izzie
kurstinhartsyou chapter 7 . 10/14/2007
I'm very glad you got rid of what's her name... the airhead girl.

Anyways, I love the chapter.

I can't wait for something to happen between Kylie and Sean.

Keep up the good work.

:D
OoohLookACat chapter 6 . 10/13/2007
oh

things are heating up lol

they're so cute

despite the somewhat obliviousness

can't wait for more

izzie
kurstinhartsyou chapter 6 . 10/13/2007
I absolutely love your story.

I cant't wait for an update.

:]
Elle8605 chapter 6 . 10/13/2007
loved this chapter. i know... getting reviews is like crack! puts u on a creative high. I feel so bad for Kylie... stupid Derek. I don't think there is a good guy on Earth with the first name of Derek! haha. Sean had to take a cold shower... someone was feeling more than happy haha.

Update soon!
Elle8605 chapter 5 . 10/12/2007
Love this story so far. Sean kicked some punk's ass! Go Sean! Update soon!
OoohLookACat chapter 5 . 10/12/2007
i love ikea

to the point where i one day want a house FILLED with ONLY ikea furniture

my mother says it'll never happen

anyways

enjoyed the chapter

it was funny

furniture shopping is pretty cool when you have tonnes of money to spare lol

sayings/phrases might be different coz im from australia

completely different continent lol

but hey, tv, movies and the internet have 'americanized' me

can't wait for more

izzie
lil' kayla chapter 4 . 10/10/2007
great chapter
Gaelfling chapter 4 . 10/9/2007
Pretty good chapter, overall.

Few things: I think you meant "waist," not "waste"; "listed," not "listen"; and "buy," not "but." Minor, but irritating.

In order to help us readers through a transition easier, it might help to put - or * or or a combination of them all whenever you switched from Kylie's to Sean's viewpoint.

But again, pretty good chapter.
OoohLookACat chapter 4 . 10/9/2007
a few spelling mistakes here and there

a few words have been...misplaced

but other than that it was quite an interesting chapter

can't wait for more

izzie
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