|Reviews for The Strays|
| Liviania chapter 2 . 3/21/2008
You might want to add little dividers to mark POV switches - I can figure it out, but it makes it a touch harder to read.
Aw, I like James. I adore happy characters (mainly because I'm a happy person.) However, they aren't written about much since stories need conflict. I don't mean characters aren't often happy in novels, they just aren't that baseline happy personality that's pretty content even when under stress. If that makes any sense.
Er, mistakes . . . all I noticed was you called James a girl-pretty boy somewhere. I assumed you meant girly-pretty boy. I didn't catch any others, but I read pretty fast.
| Ty Taco chapter 2 . 3/18/2008
I love how long the chapters are.
And the different character POV's are great.
James mind is like my little bro's.
love your story.
keep up the good work.
| Eleifa chapter 1 . 3/15/2008
Man I hope you finish this someday. You're a good writer and this could turn out really great.
| Liviania chapter 1 . 11/19/2007
Excellent beginning - I also like the small touches like Gene's power hurting.
Also, he tried his sister's yeast cream? That's utterly hilarious. _ Ah, I can't wait for the explanation. You've created an excellent atmosphere.
| magalina chapter 1 . 10/10/2007
Waah, cool start! XD Im liking these characters, I wanna read more, hope you keep writing!