loved it! ugh i wish she could realize andrew likes her!

I liked it, I thought that was really sweet of him to put together the party for her, and really stupid of Cassie not to show. Alas, what can ya do? Keep it up and update soon!

Faith

Writing a non"emotional" chapter was a great idea. I really loved it 3

Write more soon!

Aw, that was an amazing chapter. I like Kelsey and Andrew together - but I'm still not sure why he gets so tense when she gets overly happy. And I'm a bit confused about the Cassandra relationship thing. But anyway, keep updating because this is like one of my all-time favorite stories on fictionpress!

I quite enjoyed the lightheartedness of this chapter. I really like the dynamic between Andrew and Kelsey. While I don't hate Brian, I am going to put it out there that I am Team Andrew and hope that nothing drastic happens in the next few chapters to change that.

I'm still a little confused on what's actually going on with Brian, Tara, and Cassandra. I trust you'll wrap up all of the loose ends, including Andrew's family situation. Right now I'm under the impression that his mother isn't his sisters mother.

I really love how the Kelsey/Andrew relationship has grown and how Cedric, despite his bitchy twin having an attitude, showed up for the party. I'm looking forward to your future editing cuz I really want to understand wth is going on with the child. And also I was a little interested in some more of Andrew's family and how Kelsey would react to all of them together.

Interesting chapter. It feels like Drew is her boyfriend, yet they're not exclusive or really dating. I think Drew should just really lay it all out - and tell her that he really likes her.

With him being all hot and cold, it's going to hurt Kelsey. I can't wait to see Brian again, though. Maybe he'll be in the next chapter?

OK, guilty confession:

I adore this story.

Usually I am fervently against stories with the whole highschool romance concept, but this is really masterfully designed.

It's evident you actually put time into constructing this premise before just delving into a bunch of chaos and complexity that would be impossible to resolve.

The intricacy of the plot is delightful, and the writing is skillful and clever.

(did i mention i swoon for the complexity? :))

You know I was just about to give you some constructive criticism on your old summary because i didn't think it did the story justice but when i checked to get the exact wording i saw you already changed it which means you are miles ahead of me already.

With that out of the way, my main criticism deals with chapter 26 where Kelsey's conversation with Brian is almost too convoluted to follow.

I had to read it multiple times to catch the intended stream of though.

Really though, wonderful work, and keep writing!

Chapter 27 has left us with quite a painful cliffhanger.

your story is fabulous i have just spent the better part of my weekend reading your story and i can safely say that it was worth it. my only comments is that you put a lot of drama into this story and i hope you will be able to off an ending that can properly wrap up this story. and my last comment is, however unpopular this comment may be i need to say it, i kind of hoped that kelsey would get with brian despite the whole thing because one cassandra is just a bitch plain and simple and nobody not even herself know who the hell she is, it seems that she has got all these different identies to diffeent people. and lets just say that it is confusing, second off brian really seems like he likes her unlike andrew. personally i am just really tired with the whole andrew and kelsey thing, he is constantly bringing down her self esteem and it seems like kelsey is doing most of the liking in hte whole relationship, i know there can be sometimes where he is supoer sweet, but the times he's a jerk to her outweigh that, and honetly i just have a feeling that he isnt gooing ot be checking what he says anytime soon. all i am trying to say i guess is that i would like andrew better if he were at least a bit more decent to her. i am not saying to this all in one chapter but i am saying to try and trasition it in. but whatever it is your story and i do respect that. anyway despite those things that bothered me this is an exceptional story/drama. i honestly can not wait for your next update.

okay... i dont get it... why would they split up? because the mom kept it a secret, or because it was another mans baby? i didnt even notice you updated until i searched for this. i was like "wha..? an update!"

wow. awesome chapter. it was alittle confusing at first, and the part where she, sandy, and tara were arguing was also a tad confusing. but i like how its full of lies, and secrets.

i cant wait to read the next chapter. hope you have fun studying abroad!

x

Another excellent chapter.

Two huge surprises this chapter. Great story development. I love the fact you can't guess what's going to happen. How will Cedric react when he finds out about Sandy and Tara? You did mention his crush on Tara, Sandy is an *hole, in my opinion.

I feel sorry for Brian. Maybe, he's the broken hearted here?

Also I'm still uneasy about Andrew. What is his relationship with Robert? Kelsey has made some unusal observations about them in previous chapters.

Questions, questions, and more questions.

Thanks for the wonderful story. Waiting patiently for your return. Jool

so how did sandy kno that kelsey would be there? did she follow her and if andrew knew what sandy really did to deserve the rumor why didn't he say anything?

Hi! i really really like this story, having come across it just this afternoon. It was so amazing that I read it all at once!

What I like most about it is that you characters have so much depth, which is pretty rare. That your protaganist is so flawed and that makes her a lot more interesting to read, as well as being very easy to realte to. Kelsey is so obviously human; she's naive and a bit oblivious and while she's quite observant, she's still so unaware of things that are right under her nose.

I think you've done very well with the all intrigue and tiny clues which have been leading up to this denouement. It's starting to come together now and while some people may think the plot has been lagging a little, I believe you paced it well enough to be effective.

Unfortunately, I've managed to find this brilliant story just as you go away but hopefully, your overseas study goes well and you'll be back really soon to post the next chapter.

It's been a pleasure to read this, thank you so much for sharing it. Eagerly awaiting your next update!

So Tara and Sandy are lovers? I didn't see that one coming. I can't tell if Sandy really loves Tara or if she is just part of her manipulative ways.

I'm thrilled that Kelsey and Andrew are sort of together and can only hope more develops.