Have i told u dat i luv dis story? well i love this story!

**kelsey rox*

I still hate Andrew I just dont really understand how Kelsey can like him ya know he is so incredibly mean to her, that its sad. I feel bad for her I mean she doesnt seem like she wants to really hurt anyone buut Brian and Tara and i would too but in the end everyone is going to dislike her and she just wants to fit in which is not so bad hell it does make life in HS alot easier.

love this chapter. i wish andrew was real. I liked the fact that kelsey had no one to talk to but andrew before. i hope she doesn't tell her friends everything.

question though: how come cedric and sandy even though they're hot and stuff can't ever be "one of them?"

im glad we are seeing more of Kelsey's family but urgh i would hate to have a mom like kelseys. haha please update soon

Woo hoo I'm so glad that you updated i've been waiting anxiously for this chapter and i wasn't disappointed :) All i can really say is that i liked this chapter and i can't wait to find out whats going on with cassandra and andrew cause that whole thing is just confusing me now. Well great job and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter and i hope that is comes out soon but no pressure _ bye bye

loved andrew and kesley action...I like Brian too...I love this story and cant wait to see what happens next..I hope you update soon

Another great chapter. Spotted a few grammatical errors, though, but they're few are far in between.

Again, loved the Andrew/Kelsey interaction, and really enjoyed the family interactions too. Gosh, what a drama-filled family... and I think I'm really starting to like Kelsey's mom's character. I noticed though that while you use 'my mother' when you're talking (writing?) about her, you use Mitchell a lot more than 'my father'. Found it a bit weird, but I guess I'm just reading a bit more into this than necessary. Glad that she's finally letting her friends in, even though she's not ready to tell them the whole truth. Am really, really curious about Andrew, his parents and his childhood... can't wait for you to shed more light on *his* family life.

Update soon!

I dun noe why, but I like Brian more than Andrew...I think Cassie and Andrew might be hiding something and Brian seems to have too much depth to be the shallow, arse a lot think he is.

darling, your story is wonderful - i really have no excuse for not reviewing earlier, considering i read every update as soon as i see it, no matter WHAT coursework i'm neglecting! i LOVE this story and i'm sorry for my lurking ways! i really appreciate that there's no "wham, bam, thank you ma'am" here, the characters stay true to your portrayal of them and the progression, while there, is gradual and logical. not to mention, your chapters are nice and long! i think you're a genius. my favorite part this chapter? kelsey's ambush by her conniving mother - BRILLIANT! it reminded me of my own mum! as far as character like/dislike... i have to say, cedric bothers me more than anyone else. strange, right? it just seems like he's so protective of cassandra that he forgets kelsey is his sister, too, and that makes me sad. anyway, i will definitely be reviewing from here on out, i look forward to the next chapter, and i thank you immensely for sharing this story on fictionpress! :)

Great dialogue. I like how it flows, as always. I'll keep it short today because my reviews seem to be long winded at times (which probably won't happen.)

Andrew's reaction to Cassandra shows a great deal. Honestly. It means one of two things. Cassandra has a crush... or Cassandra is trying to force Kelsey to admit her feelings. Honestly? I think its the later, because no matter what, I think Cassandra loves Kelsey, and also, that she still has feelings for the main villain, Brian.

I've taken a different approach to looking at your characters, and I've begun to picture Brian as this confused guy, who's just as messed up - if not more - as Andrew.

There's more to this story than you're letting on. Looking at it now, Brian doesn't seem like the kind of guy to get into a long term relationship with someone, and then, for no reason, lose it. You even stated so in your very first chapter.

"Sandy and Brian had been on-again, off-again ever since she started high school."

On-again, off-again implies that there have always been feelings there. And to me, I think Brian is just scared of what was happening. The whole ploy with Kelsey is, in my opinion, either attempt to get close to Cassandra again (now that I'm looking at Brian's character without being automatically loathsome towards him, it sorta makes sense in my eyes.), or an attempt to look for someone similar to Sandy (seeing as how they're siblings, it seems a valid point.)

There was probably something that made Brian do what he did. That made that little switch go off. I've got the feeling its because he was scared, and did the only thing he knew to distance himself from what was scaring him.

Just because Kelsey changed a few things about herself, doesn't mean Brian would have gone up to her. I think there are more circumstances that you aren't letting on just yet.

Wow. Talk about looking TOO much into a story. But, even if I am wrong, it might at least give you an idea on where your story is going.

Chapter 15 didn't make Brian out as some bad guy. I think you're just manipulating our emotions with your words and the character's predispositions to hating Brian...

And this was long winded.. I really need to stop doing that.

Until next time!

It's not that I don't like 'like' the boys... it's just that they frustrate me, especially Andrew (who btw, for some reason my poor brain had forgotten had black hair or what he looked like at all) and I just really want him to be honest and I want Kelsey to get her man, you know? And I want Kelsey to be happy too, and man, you're story is just so full of high-school drama (something I've had my taste of and am glad is behind me) that just makes me weirdly giddy, lol, cause it's like seeing it happen to someone else and being able to laugh at or cry with them. Gah, I'm such a sentimental fool who loves happy endings. I can't wait for one... hopefully this story will have one.

And yea, so if I had to choose, it would of course be a huge YES to Andrew and a huge SCREW YOU to Brian. Lol.

This chapter was great. I love, and have pretty much liked all, of the interactions between Kels and Drew, as well as the fact that the story doesn't just focus on them together but on their lives and families. Some stories (though entertaining) focus too much on the main two characters and let everything else fall apart and have too many plot holes. Your's doesn't. It adds in little bits of everything that keep it from becoming boring and predictable.

Great job! Can't wait for the next chapter.

hurry and updtae woman!

So, you seem really upsetthat people aren't reviewing. _ I wouldn't worry. 'Cuz you and I both know that people love your story. they're probbaly just busy. Or jerks. I know I'm so beyond busy that it's crazy.

But I enjoy your story. And I like that you pointed out that first person narratives are biased. because it's true!

Good story so far! I can't wait for the next chapter!

Great story! I like the pace at which its going... not to fast or slow. But GOD does Andrew make me mad! I don't know if you meant for it to be like this, but I interpreted the entire high school heirachy as a sort of microcosm of society, you know? Like, those at the top stay at the top and will do anything to keep it that way. Just a thought... Anyways, keep it up, it's coming along great!

I'm sorry for not reviewing. :( I don't even have an excuse.

Great story, but Kelsey seems a bit too emotional, even bipolar in parts. I mean, why was she crying after he kissed her? And why was she close to crying when he yelled? She could take all the abuse from practically the whole school, and that was physical. Yet, when she's yelled at she's so sensitive. The answer to that, is probably very simple, and it'd be wicked awesome if you could reply. I can commpletely understand, if you can't though, cos writing a story ain't no piece of cake!

Update soon...pretty please?

Yours sincerely

ObliviousWanderer