i really liked this story. the fact that it is nicely written and that the storyline was really interesting had kept me awake throughout the night in order to finish this story. I really liked your wrotong style, i must say. the words or phrases or sentences in this story always seem to flow really nicely. thank you for sharing this.

Really amazing story! Been reading almost non-stop.

Love the fact that it has a real plot, unlike a lot of other romance stories on here. Appreciate the way you write and like, how you express her thoughts. Anyway, awesome job, glad I finished reading it!

I don't know what this story is about quite honestly, because I can't remember the summary and I'm simply too lazy to go check. However I really like your writing, flows. Great.

The story seems interesting, so moving on to chapter 2. :)

wo ho

i finished :)

well ... i was glad that u deviated :)

i am living in france so a better translation would be

"Vous êtes très beaux, mais n'avez absolument aucune idée et cela vous fait se faisant aimer de moi. Vous êtes comme mon rêve, je ne pourrais pas vous avoir faits mieux. Je regrette que nous ne puissions pas arrêter de parler de mes adresses françaises et je pourrais les démontrer pour vous plutôt,

tu es très belle, mais n'as absolument aucune idée...

cela vous fait se faisant aimer de moi : what do u mean ?

je regrette que on peut pas arrêter de parler de mon abibilte de parler francais, je pourrais les démontrer pour vous plutôt

there u go ... since they are friends it is more natural to use "tu" not "vous" which is a form of politness...

and "on" means we when informal :) "nous" is mostly used in formal speeches

it is good :)

and i enjoyed reading... but i hate writing ...

oh ghad~ this story got me hooked! but i have to stop at this chapter because it's almost dawn here and i need to get some sleep. haha! but sleep deprivation is worth it. your story is amazing! at first, i kinda hate to be her. i still do... hahaha.. but the story line got me reading straight for hours.

anyway, ill continue reading when i wake up. chu~

wow that was awsome

really really good

i seriously thought andrew and Kelsey were done for good

seriously i thought this was going to be a not so happy ending

ohkay enough about my stupid thinking

keep writting

I think I can only sum this up into six words: Get. This. Sucker. Published. Right. Now.

The characters are so well developed, the plot is more stimulating than an amphetamine, and the twists always made me double-take (or rather, double-read).

I haven't yet checked if there is yet, but if there isn't... I'd love to see more of these characters in the future (not necessarily Andrew/Kelsey; more along the lines of Jesse/Mora, etc. I just can't see Sandy getting her own story... her evil ways have made me dislike her!).

Alrighty, so I've read this story twice, and I can honestly say that I was intrigued the entire time- both times. All of your characters were so...if not realistic, extremely well portrayed. like most high school fiction, the situation was way more dramatic than need be, but that just really helped you to define these people. I think the strangest part about this story is that even though it's in first person, I feel like I know your main character the least. She was so caught up in everything around her that you didn't really get to know her at all. But that's okay. I swear, Andrew and Brian were so horribly attractive through her eyes. The other girls were so bitchy. it was perfect. it was juicy and full of emotion. and i'm surprised because it started off as just another high school story where a meaningless bet develops into unnecessary drama, but you feel for the characters despite all of that.

I don't know what else to say besides that I really really really loved this story. It's cliche but at the same time totally unexpected. To be honest, going into the story i thought it was going to be one of those lame high school dramas that fictionpress is notorious for, but you really surprised me. I haven't loved a story this much in a long, long time. Great job! I really hope you keep writing because I'd love to read more from you :)

oh my gosh! i love this! wish it was longer

After reading the first few chapters of your story, I wrongly assumed that I had everything figured out. I thought this would be the typical cliched high school story story of a girl who got played by the game she was trying to play, complete with the usual sibling fights, "irresistible" bad boy, and stupid love triangle. But no. Was I surprised.

You set up a bunch of nasty characters (who I never thought I could come to understand) and made them human. I was amazed by the feeling you put in Tara. At some point, she was no longer simply a manipulative cheerleading captain, but a complex character with hates, lies, loves, and hurts. I particularly love how you structured the scene between her and Kelsey that revealed her surprisingly genuine care for her mother. For the first time, I came to respect her just a bit. I am awed at how you could change my entire view on a character by one scene from someone flat and easily hate-able to someone with so many dimension that were impossible to dismiss.

I similarly enjoyed your development of Brian's character. Like Tara, it seems that he's trying to lead people to believe something about him that isn't altogether true. Even much before the scene of truth between the two sisters, I had my suspicions. His actions were sometimes dark, but he also had a strangely true side, and his character didn't match with what the rumors claimed. I love how you built that all into his character so that our hearts had started to accept him before our minds did.

I liked that you portrayed Andrew as a guy with problems trusting and interacting to closely with people. I'm tired of stories where a perfect guy sweeps the girl off her feet. Don't get me wrong. Fairy tales are just great, but they aren't quite the stuff of reality and an enjoyable plot. I think you left a lot of room for further character development, and I'm really interested in figuring out his family problems and their link to his character.

I also really thought you did a good job with Cassie's role in the story. I know that most families are dysfunctional, but Cassie and Kelsey put a whole new spin on that idea. She's just so dark yet needy, and I like how you don't paint her as black but rather of shades. I thought her interactions with her twin brother were also elucidating.

All those characters were nice, but I absolutely loved what you did with Kelsey and her nature. Let me tell you this. I absolutely detest stories where the heroine just can't seem to make up her empty little head and pick one guy, but strangely enough, I believed in her indecision. And for the first time, I was indecisive, too. I know that if I were Kelsey, I wouldn't know what to do either. I definitely wouldn't go around letting either of them kiss me till I had my head straightened out, but I would definitely be inclined to helping the one who needed me rather than kept pushing me away, even if those two sides represented black and white respectively. I thought you made her confusion real, and her dilemma substantial. I really enjoyed seeing that perspective properly done for the first time.

I could really talk about the rest of your lovely characters and the masterful and thought-provoking nature of the dialogue, but I'm too lazy, and this review would be much too long. I just wanted to point out one last thing before I got to the suggestions part of my review. That one last thing was the marvelous revelation scene. It was most definitely my favorite scene, because you took all my pre-conceived notions and flipped them over. Suddenly, everything made more sense, and the story became thousands of times more complex than what I had realized before. I applaud your ingenuity and am led to ask if you thought of all that before you wrote Chapter 1.

Having said all that, I wanted to ask you to reconsider changing the ending and continuing the story. I felt like you built so much into the plot and characters only to have an abrupt ending. I never got an explanation of the restored friendship with Mora, and I certainly didn't get any closure with Brian. I had been hoping for the union between Mora and Cedric that had been hinted throughout the story, but I never got that so I was sorely disappointed. I felt like you never developed on all you could have about Andrew's character for a more powerful ending and analysis into his character, and I wanted a redemption of some sort for Cassie and especially Tara.

I know I may be hoping for to much, but I had hoped for some sort of restoration of the sisterly relationship. I think something went wrong from the point after the revelation scene between the sisters, and the separate rooms event just led things farther from a resolution. I'll understand if you wanted to end the story making Cassie the dark angel who fell into Hell, but it certainly isn't satisfying, and it doesn't match with how you built up the rest of the story.

You can't just make Kelsey never talk to Brian again. Well, you can, but you didn't do that with Andrew. I felt like the reconciliation scene (last chapter) was too brief and too dry. When all your other scenes hold so much power, if was like you were making your story die when it could have lived longer. I don't know. I feel slightly betrayed. I know that you could have ended it better, and I know because of what you did with the previous chapters. Perhaps you felt drained from writing the story. Perhaps you didn't want anymore from the story and just a happy resolution. But for me, it's still unfinished. I don't hate the ending, but I don't love it either. Anyways, don't take any of this personally. Dose Of Your Own has overwhelmed me and has surely become a favorite. Thank you for the wonderful read.

You are talented. One day I hope to read books, that you publish, because I have a feeling you will be a good famous author one day.

Although at some points the main characters snarky comments got annoying at times, she always had to say something rude to people at times. And her crying got a little annoying sometimes, because she seemed like a girl with a lot more backbone in her and sometimes she didn't potray it.

The hazing was a little much. I would think someone would have a backbone not to push a girl so she could maybe hit her head and die. Seemed just way too out there.

Her sister just.. Makes me mad.

But this story was so REAL. I felt like I knew them and like I went to this school. I felt fer her and felt the emotions she was giving out. This is one of the best stories I've read on here so far. A lot of authors on here write very.. Can't really explain it. But the fact that I stayed up to continue reading your story and cared what happened to the characters, shows you got your point across. Gah I didn't want it to end. Kind of wish there was more Andrew and Kelsey hardcore makeout scenes going further than just what they were doing lol. I thought he was going to get her shirt off. But good job.