Reviews for Rise and Fall of the Sea
hey maria chapter 1 . 10/7/2007
I don't think you should say outright that his eyes are beautiful or his lips are incredible, but use words that describe why they're beautiful/incredible. The way you said his lips trail like velvet, for example; that was great.

I like the way this poem progresses, it's very calm and rhythmic and it reminds me of the sea. Nice job.