This story kind of reminds me of Sherrylin Kenyon's Dark Hunter series. did you get any ideas from it? It really is a great story though!

so cute!

i really hope you throw in some details for the bed scene :)

Hey,

you are such a good writer keep up the good work.

I liked it. Is there going to be a sequel?

Another question: what happened with Erika, Maggie's bestfriend?

ok so the story is okish but you do say he is so hot to often and she is so pretty and you use the words "a bit" WAY TO MUCH you like say she frowned a bit then she sighed a bit and then she smiled a bit. what are you going to say she died a bit too? that is a massive problem if you want to be a writer because being so repetitive turns paople off of your story. you should fix this story mojorly and then it might be(prolly not)goodish.

aww i loved this story. it was so great. Your an amzing writer. cant wait to read some more of your stories :)

Great story, really enjoyed reading it. Good job, keep it up :D

love the story so far!

Not a bad story. There are however,a few grammar mistakes as well as a mispelled word or two. Two mistakes that I noticed were one time you meant to say fly and you simply forgot the y, and the other was when you meant to say "Let's get this show on the road," and you said snow instead of show. Also, what happened to Michael's master? I kept expecting for him to pop up after his death. A possible sequel?

An amazing story. I'm usually not one to review, but I can honestly say that this was one of the best stories that I have seen on this site. :o)

-Jaqueline, 15

OMG!

that was amazing you should write books!

loved it!

Totally digging the story... I am not a big Vampire fan but I like it all the same. I am only to chapter 9 can't wait to finnish... I am reading it while I take a break from my huge graduation paper. I need some Alternate universe to check out of this world into. Good Job.

awe love the story. so adorable. especially the ending. the kids are so cute

Pathetic. Absolutely pathetic. Horrible.

First of all, this is exactly like Christine Feehan's books...down to the names. Niko's full name is like Nicolae from Dark Destiny. Scarletti is from Dark Symphony, and Maggie is yet another character.

Even their powers are the same, even the parents getting killed by vampires? Wow. How UNORIGINAL you are.

Seriously, you just copied her. Try and write a better story next time - not steal someone else's ideas. DUH. You can contact me at:

i just wanted to say that this was an amazing story. :)

other than a few little things, it was extreamly well written compared to most and got better over time.

i luv this story alot. good job! :D

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