Reviews for The Dark Night |
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![]() ![]() ![]() great chapterness! Good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I can't remember if I ever written a review for this story ( I read to much I think) But I love it Was this the last chapter or will there be more of this lovely story? I don't really know where to begin, I can't decide wether or not I liked the amnesia thing, but I did like the part with his mother, that she tried to ease his pain. Will Maggie be like Niko now? A hunter? That would be so nice (thats how I planned it in my head xD) I hope that there is more to come |
![]() ![]() hey so I think u should do like an epilogue and explain like how she is back and if she is now immortal cause I think she should be yeah do an epilogue! |
![]() ![]() ![]() is this the end? |
![]() ![]() ![]() is that the ending? I hope not! I difinately want some more of this story... Great storyness! Good job! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think it's weird that none of them haven't even questioned how she's back. I know if I saw someone standing in my doorway, that I had just given a funeral too, I'd probably be scared shitless. While this is a supernatural story, you've still got to have elements of realism in it. So I would write that in. I think there needs to be more skepticism. More doubt. Faith |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, it's a bit strange...in an intriguing way. I still think you're moving a bit fast paced. Add more, it's alright to have filler chapters. You don't need something huge happening in every chapter. Ya know? By adding more detail, you'll be giving the story more...hmm...alright, I'm gonna use depth again hah. If you have any questions, let me know. Also, proof-read. There's quite a few mistakes. Like, tanks instead of thanks. Things like that. Faith |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hmm, I feel that these last few chapters have been far too fast paced, not enough detail. Plus, it's all a little soap opera-ish. If you go back, add more scenes, give it a bit more depth. :) Faith |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice story so far. |
![]() ![]() ![]() and the suspense... sweet job |
![]() ![]() ![]() i totally love this story hope you update soon -gillx |
![]() ![]() ![]() WOW that was awsome! update again soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just a few spelling errors but other than that, I like it. I love the name Niko but Nikolai is even hotter, aha. |
![]() ![]() ![]() totally amazing story! I usually just read a story and not reply but I just couldn't do that with this story... The story is great and PLEASE CONTINUE WRITING THIS STORY! |
![]() ![]() ![]() how is it that his brother is still alive when every1 in his family died? and can't maggie become a immortal? |