Oh my god! I just read every chapter in a row, I couldnät stop! It's amazing. Usually Im a vampire girl, I always love the vampires in the story but man do I hate yours. They are obnoxious! But Niko on the other hand, he's like my dream man! And you describe him and everyone else so well!

And I love the names your characters' got!

Whenever I start reading a story I always find some negative bits but when it's time to review I've gotten so caught up in the story that I can't remember what it was. This happened here aswell

But keep up the good work and Im looking forward to a new chapter.

I'm so happy you updated! I can't wait for the next chapter!

wow. *stares at the story's awesomeness*

i had to go back and read the whole story agen. *squee* u write really really well, and i absolutely lurve ur story! i can't wait for ur next update! xo

Ah. I haven't updtaed in awhiel but OMG OMG what's gonna happen? who's gonna win? BAH~!

Update soon.

I liked it, although I think you rushed through things a bit fast. Keep it up and update soon :)

Faith

I love it, it's still really fast paced. If you edit it, I'd suggest slowing the plot down a bit and making it longer and adding detail. But this chapter was good.

Ok, we get Maggie is small and Niko is big, please you some synonyms if you are still going to emphasize those facts, small and big become a little redundant, and i think you can do better.

and i'm no explert, i took french, but isn't "te amo" spanish not italian?

and this chapter was a little mushie... like a teenage girl fantasy. we get they love each other, but there was no internal monologue to explain Maggie's fear of Niko leaving her because she's mortal. it kind of just came out of the blue. Without that Maggie just seems needy.

Other than that i saw no punctuation or spelling errors. Keep writing!

I love the story it is amazing. Update soon!

I love this story. It's funny and different. Can't wait for the next chapter

so will she become immortal too? and is the bad guy a old friend of niko's

Oh decidly creepy in places, very cool.

JM

last chapter ended with her skinny dipping and this one

started out with her wearing a bikini XD lol.

i wonder if shell turn immortal with him :)

PLEASE UPDATE!

and who is that at the end?

the person who was "watching" her shop?

Great chapter, as always. I love their relationship. Good luck on the job hunt! Thanks for the update.

I liked it. Good chemistry between them. Keep it up and update as soon as you can!

Faith

You have a good consistent style and flare. This new genre is working for you and your characters are sweet, though they need a bit more background details. Update asap please, congrats on graduating soon!