Reviews for The Men's Bathroom from a Female Perspective |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Haha, this is..I don't know, funny? I like it! Update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nicely written. Doesn't every girl feel like Darcy, knowing they'res no line for the men's room but it takes forever for the girls. Ha! Totally. And poor Talia, having to go in after her. I wouldn't. It's a good story, has an unusual meeting predicament which makes it interesting. no overused boy-meets-girl scenario, which I love. |
![]() ![]() ![]() tres amusant! |
![]() ![]() ![]() hahah love it going to keep up with this storry hilasrouldd! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hahaha, it's rather funny and handled well as it's not overflowing with pretentious 'i'm so witty' stuff. There's a lot of potential here, but the only thing that strikes me as a bit... awkward is how it's in first person pov of Georgie, yet it's interrupted by a 3rd person pov in order to introduce Darcy. I'm wondering why you chose to do that, because it seems a little disruptive. I'm also wondering how boy-BOY georgie is as well, since it's still rather ambiguous just how much the girliness influenced him. For one thing, though there's been urinal jokes (not being able to piss when someone's standing next to you) I've always thought guys were usually comfortable with crapping and general bathroom..ness... stuff. I always thought it was just a girl thing to want complete privacy when it comes down to it (while the guys are comparing the size or quantity of their crap...). Or maybe I'm just wrong. Anyway, good job on portraying a guy who doesn't sound like a girl trying to sound like a dude. Keep it up! |
![]() ![]() ![]() hahaha. You're a good writer. I liked this. One thing confused me though ... is Georgie really a boy-boy and his parents were just prepared for a girl and therefore raised him as one initially? It just was never really made clear if he was a boy or a hermaphrodite. I'm interested to see how this all works out. I'm guess Darcy and Georgie will get together or something like that. Anyway, well written. |
![]() ![]() cute/funny/i wanna read more |
![]() ![]() ![]() i loved the introduction really original idea. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting summary. ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() hilarious, i enjoyed this chapter (: the title really caught my eye. update soon, can't wait! |