Reviews for Vulnerat
Next Exit chapter 1 . 11/8/2007
"I pushed you, it was with both hands. Small or not."

I love that line.

Great work.

-Cat
cynth ballerina chapter 1 . 10/24/2007
This is gorgeous. Every single word fits and dances about naturally. I loved it
i'll ask the stars above chapter 1 . 10/18/2007
oh. mike popped into my head for that one, nice. nice nice nice.
dress her up in fairytales chapter 1 . 10/16/2007
"You'd already found that, tucked/beneath my tongue; you slid it free"

hm, my tongue danced inside my mouth at this verse.

i'm in love with this piece so much - it's too beautiful for words because it reminds me so much of him and the things that shouldn't have happened.
Alicia Marianne chapter 1 . 10/16/2007
somehow i can relate to this...it feels what im going through with someone right now and i love how you put it into words.
xfail chapter 1 . 10/16/2007
You described this incredibly well. I really liked it, and your choice of words and stanza organization were great. Good job.
fairytale failure chapter 1 . 10/16/2007
So, this one is kind of average for your standards. However, I adored the idea of the piece beneath your tongue, the two bits about it (in the first and fourth stanzas) really stood out as very original and well described.