|Reviews for Revolutions|
| siphoned afterglow chapter 1 . 2/17/2008
and very captivating. The way you expressed the way you feel is truly amazing. A mix of faint bitterness and dissapoinment and something like hope emerging out of it.
| essenceflower chapter 1 . 11/7/2007
I didn't like the format and the way you broke up the sentences/words, but I liked the topic and the way you portrayed it.
| Tytherpol chapter 1 . 11/1/2007
my sister told me yesterday that i should get glasses/braces/etc so i would look like a nerd. that way, she said, i would fit in somewhere b/c people would know who i was-a nerd.
i told her i believe i already pretty much am one already, but she said i am not...i'm just smart, she said.
if i had the look, people would see me as a nerd and stop questioning what's up with me. i told her i didn't want to labeled as anything. then i asked her what a revolutionary looks like.
"there isn’t any revolution that wants/me/to be a part of it,/but maybe there’s an uprising, or a river/to cross,..."
-i love this part a lot.
and "eloquently circular and/fingernail thin, like our/assurances have grown." says a lot and sets a great tone.
nice job on this.
| review chapter 1 . 10/23/2007
lots of paradoxes, awesome imagery...profound poem overall.
great expression of emotion and separation of stanzas.
creativeness reigns in your poem, and it aint bad at all.
| the face in the window chapter 1 . 10/22/2007
"So write this in the/ starlight/ in whatever ink you can find
or create,/ because in the end if anything/ matters it isn’t what lasts but what/ we make of what never will."
You are a breaktaking poet, you know that?
| half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
"because in the end if anything matters, it isn't what lasts but what we make of what never will." - My favorite line(s) of the whole poem. This was an interesting style, one I don't remember seeing before. I liked how you utilized it in that way - the way you broke up the sentences, etc. :)
I was wondering - that line I mentioned - can I add it to my quote book (with credit given to you, of course). I won't unless given permission, but I really hope you say yes. :P