You can't just leave it there! Hurry and update! Please?

Interesting addition. Sorry for taking so long to R&R. Have a fantastic summer.

~Twilight Starr~

I love it so far! :) can't wait til your next update

ok... that was interesting. I like the plot line, i think.

I love it when Michael is embarrassed. That part was still funny to me. And I like the way this ends...

Nice addition. Have a wonderful day. :D

~Twilight Starr~

Michael is so sweet. Autumn really does have a troubled past with that ex and all. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~

Autumn seems to be quite the troublemaker. ;) Nice job on detail.

~Twilight Starr~

Poor Autumn. Nice job with the background information.

~Twilight Starr~

Good start. I liked that she threw her stuffed monkey at him. That was amusing.

Thanks for your review of "A Liar's Mission". It's appreciated.

Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a wonderful day.

~Twilight Starr~

I read this already, but I wanted to leave a fun review. This was a very intense chapter. Autumn going off in the night and we have no idea what she did! I wonder if that will come up, or if it is trvial, and just knowing that she did it is all that is important. I can't wait to see how Michael will respond and get her to talk!

I also noticed that you didn't go with some of the editing suggestions I made, which is fine. Some little things I think should still be changed (like, stared instead of starred in the first paragraph), but other things I can understand go along with your writing style.

Oh yeah, I also liked the appearance by Autumn's ex. He's creepy.

Great job! I hope more people can read!

The first thing that jumps out at me in this story is how the case changes from the second line to the second. At first it's past tense (looked) then it's different (feeling overwhelmed) as well at breathe instead of breath. The second paragraph is riddled with similar errors. I enjoy your story concept, but it is difficult for me to read because the errors stop it from flowing nicely.

Yay! Great job. I already gave my feedback, but I know it's much more fun to get a real review. I read it again, and it still made me giggle.

My favorite part: "Wh-what! I've seen things. I mean guys...I-I've seen guys without shirts. Shirtless. I've seen it before."

Nice chapter! Keep up the good work!

GrannyP

Hi, it's me again. Thanks for posting another chapter. I really like the plot of your story and the direction it seems to be heading. I don't think I have caught how old your protagonist is. Is she still in high school, or older? Michael is 20 I remember, but I couldn't guess if she is about his age or younger.

Well, I really hate criticizing other people's writing, but I figure you probably want honest feedback if you are posting on FP. I REALLY like the plot of your story, but the technical part of your writing could use a bit of work; I noticed quite a few typos, and word choice/punctuation errors. I would gladly help you out with editing if you would like. Your story is really good, and I would hate for other people to complain just because of the little stuff like commas and such.

Please reply and let me know how I can be of assistance.

If you have time, try to check out my work-in-progress, Secret Memories. It's kind of long, so I could understand if you aren't able to get to it.

Keep writing and good luck with everything!

GrannyP

Hey, the summary of your story sounded interesting, so I thought I would check it out. I really like the plot so far. I am wondering if we are going to hear about more of the back story about why the girl OD'ed? I am curious to see what is going to happen next with her and her wedding date.

Keep writing and have a great day!

GrannyP