Reviews for drowning
whispered something profound chapter 1 . 10/22/2007
love it:) the simplicity is nice. just a question. thats all. and a good one at that. i feel like it is much too blurry in my life as to who exactly is helping me and harming me. its one of the hardest questions for me.
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
I would want to know the answer to that question, too.

Nice, little short poem.

Twilight Starr
half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
konban wa

I liked that last line a lot. Great, abrupt way to end it. :) I think you should lengthen the first line somehow because it throws off the balance of the poem. Maybe even if you just spaced it out really - that might even be enough. Like:

You know that style. Or else put the poem in the middle of the page so that it's sort of balanced in a way. *shrug*

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-Shan-