|Reviews for drowning|
| whispered something profound chapter 1 . 10/22/2007
love it:) the simplicity is nice. just a question. thats all. and a good one at that. i feel like it is much too blurry in my life as to who exactly is helping me and harming me. its one of the hardest questions for me.
| Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
I would want to know the answer to that question, too.
Nice, little short poem.
| half-sketched.staccatos chapter 1 . 10/21/2007
I liked that last line a lot. Great, abrupt way to end it. :) I think you should lengthen the first line somehow because it throws off the balance of the poem. Maybe even if you just spaced it out really - that might even be enough. Like:
You know that style. Or else put the poem in the middle of the page so that it's sort of balanced in a way. *shrug*