Reviews for Fruits
Undead Serenade chapter 1 . 6/12/2008
'When you blush

you look like a cherry

I wanna eat you

(eat me too)'

Yummy. I like most of this- though the other reviewer was right- the repetition here is not so profound and effective.

'sweet&sour sauce uh!'

Cute. The uh! is so perfect.

I wish you'd added a little more imagery, but it's cute overall.

(kiss me unitl losing my breathe)

*until *breath

and I'm not sure if losing works. Until I'm losing my breath? Dunno.
Scarlett Wynter chapter 1 . 6/3/2008
I like the imagery you use, it's tasteful, but fun and upbeat. ;)
Aomera chapter 1 . 3/25/2008
there are some great ideas here!yeh lemons can be sweet!

wonderfully written.

glad you could imagine my poem 'caressed by the moon' like magic :) Ax
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 11/6/2007
Cute song.

Twilight Starr
AuraBorealis chapter 1 . 11/6/2007
nive work. keep writin
Through Glass Eyes chapter 1 . 10/29/2007
This is cute and I like the ideas you used.
smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 10/24/2007
That's really cute. I love the way that you took such a unique perspective when writing this. It was great. Originality is lacking for some reason...Everything is recycled again and again. And maybe recycling helps our environment but recycling poetry doesn't. I think that's more detrimental to our society. Repetitious. The same old junk over and over again. We never learn and through repetition we are kind of taught that is the way we are to think; within the lines. Haha. Yeah, anyways, going back to the topic. Your poem was wonderful. Yes, absolutely amazing. )
McKenzie Drestire chapter 1 . 10/24/2007
Liked the imigary and loved the rhepitition of colour and tastes, really clever poem, keep writing

Peaceout, kenzie