Reviews for intro to organ donation
evm chapter 1 . 3/4/2008
I think my favorite part of this, and probably one of the only intelligent sounding comments I can make about this poem it that the pacing is lovely and perfect. And that I adore the title (I'm sp horrible at concrit, aren't I?). The last last lines were so beautiful to me, and I love that you broke the line with "arching" to let "wide" and "gentle" get their own line, breaking the rhythm and making a lovely fadeaway ending that lets the poem linger on in your thoughts minutes after you're done reading the actual text on the page.
Aimee Raven chapter 1 . 2/18/2008
I love this...it's so anatomical but there's a feeling of *lust* to it...it's a sort of blur of very intense, enrapturing images so it's quite open to interpretation. Great choice of words!
White Tea and Ginger chapter 1 . 10/28/2007
this is hot/cold beautiful.