a very cool twist. i luvs this story. I was so worried you had died, or lost intrest, or something. But not! thanks for updating!

Yay! You posted! It's been forever! The chapter was good, a bit of a slow start now that you're back from your other story. I felt that how Samael and Eve behaved to each other in the beginning of the chapter was out of character. I also thought that the conversation between Luke, Aram and the rest was awkward. I suppose it was a bit more difficult to read through than usual because of those things, but it's the first chapter in a while, so hopefully it'll all get back on track again. I appreciate all of your allusions to the Bible - that's really cool.

hey cool D hmm... don't know whether it's just me... but am i right in saying that eve and samael are in that sam tavern...? and that theyre gonna bump into each other in one way or an other... and then the chase will rebegin...? or something like that? hehe

update soon! D

Hi There!

I see your holiday was productive! I like this chapter much better (though, i wouldn't knock a little editing of the last). You maintain a consistency, and give a little background before we really get into the sh*t. It kinda feels like there was a break in the story-as if you put it aside to pick it back up-but, it's only slight, and non-consequential. I definitely like how you've explained how Aram and Christian are travelling without being blinded, and how you've introduced yet another new character, Ravi. The descriptions surrounding him are beautiful and reminds me of hindu gods/goddesses. Some fun research might be on the pictorals of hindu goddess to gather a sense of how to color Ravi, how to shape him, without sounding too stereotypical.

I am in love with the contrasting relationship between Eve and Samael and Aram. Eve being bound to the bed really reflects their relationship and the role of the wife in an arranged typed setting. I think you're really touching on very intriguing subtext for the time period. Also, the descriptions of Samael's eyes, the blank unseeing power of the patriarch. Powerful! Maybe i'm getting too English major on you, but i really think it's fab!

In short, i love what you've done here. It's very quiet before the storm. Oh, and it's La Guerra de Vida. Or, La Vida Guerra. (sorry, am I a correction-nazi or what?)

yay! another great chapter!

Was going good til I hit this chapter...ya kinda lost me at the bullshit alternate "majick" spelling. Why not just spell it "Maejguik" and be done with it?

ok so i have just been VERY busy reading through your so far 27 chapters... not an easy task... but one i really wanted to do because i am seriously into this story right now D

this story is really original-(thats a good thing) i'm loving it D

the chapters were slightly short for a start (really short actually lol) but they got longer as the story developed and soon they were a good size so hey nothing to worry about D

hmm... you had me very surprised about the goblin thing-(i thought you were going to have Aram as another creature- like maybe and elf or dark elf or some kind of handome yet fearsome looking beast of the night- or something LOL)but i'm liking the goblins, because it wasn't what was expected P

and besides i don't know much about goblins... (last time i saw a goblin was briefly in lord of the rings 1- in the caves of moria (and le me tell you they were as pretty and cute as the orcs themselves)P

well good luck for your next chapter D

And i hope you update really really soon! ! D

I think the finals stress has gotten to you. The writing isn't as visual, and you don't take advantage of the language to make Aram's anger more fierce, more poetic, which i know is possible for you. With Muriel and Luke have no connecting flow as well, and you ended there in a rush, rather than carefully and deliberately. i think some editing is in order.

good things definitely were in the plot: i like the Eve's mom possibly cheated on her dad, and that you respected the history of changelings by altering that fact. Andd...since i finally have a story up, i think it would be kind of you to return the favor, no matter how harsh it is.

I suppose it was more of a filler chapter of sorts, but, yes, it is exam week over here, too, so I completely understand. Good luck with those tests!

apparently we know what the bloody conflicts are.

i like short chapters because I can't read like, a 17 page long thing in one sitting. it gets boring, unless its really good (which may explain why I'm going to be late for school by reading this at a very bad time)

Incredible...can't wait for the next chapter!

Your plot rocks. It's unpredictable to me for the most part. Aside from any foreshadowing you use, I have no idea what will happen. Which is awesome, I hate predictable stories.

totally awesome!

EXCELLENT!

I really like Muriel, she seems to earnest, and sweet. A little naive, but still great. I really like that you took my suggestion about the chapter. I think it was a nice fit.

congrats on another great chapter!

Happy Writing.

off again on a whirlwind adventure!