BEAUTIFUL STORY

Really, really simple, and really, really lovable! Keep it up!

You know why I hate you? Because you're a tease!

The food spray was sick and lovely.

How Zeke confessed his feelings with the whole "crush" thing was so cute.

The proposal was sweet and non-cliche.

Why, oh why, did you make it a one shot?

aw this was soo cute! ) lovedd it

I reckon it would be weird having a crush on a guy that much younger than me :p But it does happen, very cute!

I like the background of the couple, from where it began to where it is at the end of the story. The only thing is that you need to pick a verb tense. If you want it to be a flashback, begin with the have past participle and ease into simple past tense. I also think this story might flow better if it were in 1st person, from Rebecca's point of view.

But good job. It's funny that I just finished a story for my Fiction class, and one of the main character's is Zeke. I thought it was a relatively singular name at the time.

This is so cute, even though I'm always been anti-older-female relationships (wherever). I think there's some words and/or punctuation missing... perhaps that's just FP's bugs? Writing's great, though. I love it. (:

That's a sweet little story

AW THIS IS GOING ON MY FAVS