this is good

LOVED IT!

Excellent job :O) I love Peter. And good for Dev! The whole time while reading this, 'Before He Cheats' was in my head! As soon as she whipped out that bat, the song came to me :O) I would love to do that if a guy ever hurt me like that, but I really wouldn't want to pay for the damages...

BRILLIANT

wow! this is awesome, i just read it cuz of to stay below the sea, and i really like it. peter sounds hot, and go devonny! tehe

Hahahahah, take that Ryan. Oh, he got owned :)Loved your story.

That was cute. And amusing, energizing, - sweet revenge right?

Great story.

Thanks for sharing

HAHAHAHA! I totally love it! I can relate to Devonny since I seem timid at times and don't really show my anger out. But man, if my boyfriend cheated on me, I think I'll do worse than she did. XD .-;

that's so cute

in a totally 'hear me roar' kinda way

hehe loved it

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hahahahaha that cracked me up!

peter sounds sexy. and dev is a cool chick although i was like 'dump ryan' at the beginning.

but the ending was awesome

fun to read! :)

that was perfect... just what i needed after my day

Oh my God, that was hopelessly cute! I was two paragraphs in, and the story already grabbed me. Haha!

If this is the first time you tried writing in this style, then I congratulate you. This is awesome! I love how Devon's mind worked: about how outwardly meek she was, but deep inside she wanted to scream and kick someone. It's amusing how, in her mind, she debates with others and how she even debates with herself. I love how she tries to rationalize the things that happen.

And I love the element of surprise Peter had. Everything he did and said were sort of right what we'd think a guy like him would do, but then they weren't what we thought a guy like him would do. I suppose it just shows he we really don't know him...sorta.

I loved how you started, how you developed, and how you ended this fic. You, my friend, are awesome.

This was good. really good. I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work, especially with your other stories, because I'm really looking forward to it. And you have potential. Don't give up. Keep writing and revise.

Ok, inspirational speech aside (cause don't we all want someone to tell us that sort of thing if it's true?) I hope I can see more one shots and continuations of your current stories. :) Good luck!

oHmYgOd!

It was awesome!i cant seem to stop giggling...ryan so deserved the "car-thrashing"...i liked devonny too[nice name!]...and loved PETER!...god bless him!

aww cute I love this story

excellent :]