Holy crap, this was in second person? I didn't notice and usually I hate second person, but for this I that didn't even cross my mind once! Even after I found out that it was in second person. The characters are so awesome and I ship them. I ship them. I ship them. I ship them sooo much. The writing style was so awesome. I'm just so proud of this story *sniff sniff* Good job!

so intenseee...I love it :D

This was amazing. So brilliantly written. Just...wow.

I am happy right now.

I LOVE 1st person, when it's well executed. And this was sniper accurate: sexy. Thank you.

This is amazing :) Really well written and the second person was really interesting :)

I love this, it's so compelling. :)

god i love your style of writing, it's enticing. i don't think i could write the words down for the way you make me feel with your writing but god i wish i could write down a thousand its like this casual but so real sense i dont know its like capturing human nature i mean i just, ive read it several times over and wow i just admire the way you capture a brotherly aura to their relationship, like this kinship you just dont feel anywhere else and man im just i can feel it. youve got an fantastic talent, pinning down people to the words like you do i wish i had caught you five or whatever years prior man

This was lovely, I really liked the person that talked (don't know if his name is mentioned) His thoughts were nice and sweet.

...Maybe this reader is just too dumb. But what did Jack say before the start of the chapter? ... Eh, I'll fill in a fantasy then.

Great writing, haha. :)

this is just... awesome

Oh good lord, this is amazing. I have a problem with too much dependency on dialogue, so I always find it extremely impressive when a story can be pulled off without much of it at all.

That aside, it's beautiful, near-flawless, I'd say, and the subject matter is handled logically and, I feel, appropriately. I really like that yes, there are thoughts of "what am I doing, what am I doing," but at the same time there aren't inner monologues upon inner monologues of "I'm so disgusting O why do I feel these things," etc. I think this is just, overall, very well done.

Brilliant work.

This is the one-shot I keep returning to. I meant to review but I didn't have a FP account at the time. But now I do! And this story is awesome. I love the perspective; that's what drew me to it in the first place.

I've got two words for you : fucking HOT. _

Incredibly well written! I'm really happy that I managed to chance upon this story. It was quirky, beautiful in a strange way and overall, a good read. Keep up the great work!