Reviews for The Broken Rule
thevinylcountdown chapter 1 . 1/4/2010
Brilliant! Very unique. :)
Cynion chapter 1 . 6/19/2009
oh wow. this was so short, but the impact of the last sentence seriously gave me goosebumps.

awesome awesome writing! it hurt pretty bad.

just a minor issue: maybe you should raise the ratings a bit?

abc123 chewy chapter 1 . 1/24/2009
dude... that sucks. seriously.
wildyoungthings chapter 1 . 1/18/2009
It's such a good short story, but I think it could be longer. The description and imagery and the writing overall is so very good. It just wasn't long enough to really have a slamming impact.
Saphimire Karishnikova chapter 1 . 12/6/2007
I love it; how the raw emotion comes flowing through effortlessly. And the last sentence was ... *blissful sigh* :D

Just one little itty bitty thing: ... should the rating be changed, possibly, to M? ... It seems a little... um... strong, to be a T... But other than that, lovelovelove.

Are you going to make this into a chapter length fic? 'Cause it really has the potential - background information into the characters and what exactly their relationship is, and their future, maybe?

But I like it as a one-shot very much. *thumbs up* xD
Emily James chapter 1 . 11/17/2007
I've actually gone through such a experience before - except that he didn't think I'd find out. It was terrible. But reading this was even more terrible (in a good way, I assure you). Good job on the characterisation.
blushyyy chapter 1 . 11/17/2007
v. good, full marks for the angst factor.
Ferrie chapter 1 . 11/11/2007
I must be sadistic because I really liked it.
hellogoodbye chapter 1 . 11/11/2007
omg this is so sad...
katie chapter 1 . 11/11/2007
dis is very painful but very good! you shud write more and more...

Core Satiated chapter 1 . 11/10/2007
What a heartbreak. Oh, all right, I have to concede that you single-handedly have turned me into a romance fan. If most romance writing is this good, than I am sorry that I have been missing out on it.

You have given me a great idea for a oneshot...I hope I can write romance this good.
fallinginlove chapter 1 . 11/10/2007
Wow. I thought I really liked The Perfect Guy, but I can't believe your talent with oneshots!

This one was so short, yet it made me feel so much hurt.

What an asshole! How could he do that? Guys are terrible!

HAHA, sorry I sound so heated about this - I just broke up with my boyfriend.

Oh god, I'm rambling again.

But really, I like this. I'm gonna show it to my best friend now :D Hope you write more and more oneshots!
inthenickoftime chapter 1 . 11/8/2007
I felt the tension rising with every successive paragraph, and my hand literally squeezed my mouse when "she" saw her lover with someone else.

I felt all the aching pain that I know "she" would feel.

Why? Why did those eyes stay on her, to see the heartbreak on her face?

Why does "he" feel the need to hurt her by making her witness the scene?

But yet, like all the other reviewers, I somehow don't hate him. Why?
candid chapter 1 . 10/29/2007
D: That's so depressing, and yet, sadly, it seems to be a growing trend in relationships. I've never had it dealt to me that badly before, but this story reminds me of the times I've had my heart broken. It was very well-written. I love the way you manage to convey such a dirty, almost 'pornographic' scene so eloquently. Good job. Looking forward to more wonderful pieces from you in the future.

Your fan,

-candid :)
jessica chapter 1 . 10/29/2007
Ouch. That hurt so bad.

My god, this was really well-written, I feel so bad for "her".

And the guy! For some reason, I can't hate him. It's like, he's just trying to protect himself and her?

I take it that the rule was to not fall in love with each other?

God, that stings.

Well done! I'll definitely be checking out your other works!

love, jessica.
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