Reviews for Instantation |
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![]() ![]() ![]() "flipped my onto my stomach"-"flipped me onto my stomach". "groled"-"growled". The reference to her past about the sun goddess was good. Nice work. Keep writing! ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() I felt so sorry for her because she was in pain. Great job at describing that pain. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() "Walked tilted"-"Walker tilted". The encounter between her and Ade was interesting. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great job at showing her past. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Her compassion for the family is touching and can possibily be a foreshadowing clue. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() It definitely sounds like he's in trouble. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter was a good way to gain insight into her past. I liked the shortness of it. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() This chapter made me feel bad for the vampire. I think Vanya's right about Walker getting in over his head. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was an interesting addition. Walker makes me curious. Nice work. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love the summary. Nice title. I like the name Walker. It sounds like an original plot. Nice work. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have a lovely day and a wonderful summer. ~Twilight Starr~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Finally an update... I've been wondering if you'd dropped the story or something. Keep writing, if it really is going to get better. Not that it hasn't been good, there just hasn't been a lot of action lately. I agree, graph paper really is wonderful! It's better to draw on than notebook paper. Although writing is fine with college ruled, too. I absolutely hate wide ruled, I can't write as much and the lines are too widely spaced and dark. It just doesn't look right. Anyway, stick with this story. ~~ 안녕! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story... I like how you did the blood bond thing where the human was master, and how you made the vampire a girl and the human a guy instead of the other way around. It's a nice change. Yup, some spelling mistakes, but so what, it's the story that counts. Keep updating, please! ~~ 안녕 ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the little girl. She is fun. Walker seems really arrogant and doesn't plan things out well, does he? He reminds me of stupid males in adventure movies like Sahara and whatnot. You hate his misjudgement but he's sexy so it doesn't matter. Heh. And Taaja is just a crazy killing machine. Her character is really unhuman right now...which is probably what you are going for. I have assumptions about how things are going to play out but I'll save them for later. ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() "his appearance striking with his glossy black hair and striking blue eyes" It just felt like 'striking' was overused. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Update soon. |